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Describe the diagram shown below

Describe the diagram shown below BJDy9
The diagram shows a wave-energy machine that can convert kinetic energy to electrical energy and it can be good source of energy. The wave-energy machine is made of two champers one that can store the water, and the other chamber will contain the turbines and an electricity generator. First of all a wave rushes to the machine, next, the water levels will rise in the machine which can lead to moving the fans of the turbines because of the force of the air that is made of the difference between the pressure inside the machine and the pressure outside the machine. once the turbines start working the kinetic energy will convert to electrical energy by the electricity generator. Wave-energy machines can't be built near the beach because it will now be effective, the reason behind it is the small waves there, that can lead to a little difference in the water levels which will make the turbines move, but not as powerful as they should. So building a wave-energy machine must be in deep sea, however, it might be expensive because of the installation cost.
The diagram
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shows
a wave-energy
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machine
that can convert kinetic
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energy
to electrical
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energy
and it can be
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good
source of energy.

The wave-energy
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machine
is made
of two champers one that can store the water, and the other chamber will contain the
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turbines
and an electricity generator.

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First of all
a wave rushes to the
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machine
,
next
, the water levels will rise in the
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machine
which can lead to moving the fans of the
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turbines
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because
of the force of the air that
is made
of the difference between the pressure inside the
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machine
and the pressure outside the
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machine
.
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once
the
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turbines
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start
working the kinetic
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energy
will convert to electrical
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energy
by the electricity generator.

Wave-energy
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machines
can't
be built
near the beach
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because
it will
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now
be effective, the reason behind it is the
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small
waves there, that can lead to a
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little
difference in the water levels which will
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make
the
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turbines
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move
,
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but
not as powerful as they should.
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So
building a wave-energy
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machine
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must
be in deep sea,
however
, it might be expensive
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because
of the installation cost.
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6.0
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