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In my family, father is the human who I love and respect the most. My father is forty seven years old. Overall, my dad has a fairly well-proportioned figure for a height of one meter and seventy. He has oval face and black hair. He looks so manly with tan skin, bright brown eyes and a straight nose. My father is knowledgeable, a strict man and very serious about his work. So, you shouldn’t disturb my dad while he’s working. However, when not working, my father is very funny. He is also very good at sports and he likes play table tennis the most. He plays very well, I try a lot but my dad always won. He is the best player in my area.
In my family,
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father
is the human who I
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love
and respect the most. My
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father
is
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forty seven
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.
Overall
, my dad has a
fairly
well-proportioned figure for a height of one meter and seventy. He has oval face and black hair. He looks
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so
manly
with tan skin, bright brown eyes and a straight nose. My
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father
is knowledgeable, a strict
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man
and
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very
serious about his work.
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So
, you shouldn’t disturb my dad while he’s working.
However
, when not working, my
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father
is
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very
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funny
. He is
also
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very
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good
at
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sports and
he likes play table tennis the most. He plays
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very
well, I try a lot
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but
my dad always won.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
He
is the best player in my area.
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IELTS academic describe someone you love or admire

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1 paragraphs
125 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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