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These maps depict the development that has been occurring in Grange Park from 1920 until now. It is clear from the graph, the area became more modernized than before. According to what is shown, on the southern part of the region, all seats, rose garden, and glasshouse were demolished, and a new water feature was built in on the southern-eastern corner. Also, a modern entrance underground car park was constructed. Moving to the north-east part of the park, it is noticeable that, the last rose garden and Pond for water plants were redeveloped into café and children’s play area respectively. Taking a closer look at the center of the district, the ancient fountain had been flattened, and a new four-seat rose garden was erected instead. In the last part of the area, on the northern-western part, the rose garden remained untouched, while the seats were crushed. Furthermore, the stage for musicians was turned to the huge amphitheater for concerts. To sum up, we could say that, despite the apparently significant changes that took place in Grange park, the Grange park’s overall plan remained almost the same during one hundred and one years.
These maps depict the development that has been occurring in Grange
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Park
from 1920 until
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now
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clear
from the graph, the area became more modernized than
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before
. According to what
is shown
, on the southern
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part
of the region, all seats,
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rose
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garden
, and glasshouse
were demolished
, and a new water feature
was built
in on the southern-eastern corner.
Also
, a modern entrance underground car
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park
was constructed
. Moving to the north-east
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part
of the
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park
, it is noticeable that, the last
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rose
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garden
and Pond for water plants
were redeveloped
into café and children’s play area
respectively
. Taking a closer look at the center of the district, the ancient fountain had
been flattened
, and a new four-seat
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rose
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garden
was erected
instead
. In the last
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part
of the area, on the northern-western
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part
, the
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rose
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garden
remained untouched, while the seats
were crushed
.
Furthermore
, the stage for musicians
was turned
to the huge amphitheater for concerts. To sum up, we could say that, despite the
apparently
significant
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changes
that took place in Grange
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park
, the Grange
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park’s
overall
plan remained almost the same during one hundred and one years.

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