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Describe a good decision you made recently What it was When you made it What the result was And explain how you felt about it

Generally, many home decision makers may be father, elder brother and sometimes mother. Different homes have different stories. I would like to share something of my decision at home. Recently, I purchased a new car. I got a quotation a few months ago. My father was very excited for this car at that time but we have no enough money for that so we decided to take a loan from the bank and the loan amount was 5 lakhs. EMI was 10k so That was very expensive for us to repay. my parents were sad for that situation and I also as well as. I am working in an IT company and I am interested in the share market at that time the share market was too low for COVID-19. In that time the market, company, bank was totally closed so that the share market continuously was going to the low side. I thought of one idea to invest some Rs. In the share market but my father did not agree for that because it was very risky in the share market as per my dad thought. But I convinced him and I were interested in a few rs. Of Around 3 lakhs. After that market and company reopened and the market was going to be Normal so the share market graph is going up side. We invested rs. Was triple in a couple of months. My parents are happy that I made a good decision. After that we have no need to get a loan for the car. I felt very happy for making a good decision for my family and my father was also proud of me.
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mother.
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homes have
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stories. I would like to
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something of my
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purchased
a new car. I
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got
a quotation a few months ago. My
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father
was
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very
excited for this car at that time
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but
we have no
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enough
money for that
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we decided to take a loan from the bank and the loan amount was 5 lakhs. EMI was 10k
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so
That was
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very
expensive for us to repay.
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my
parents were sad for that situation and I
also
as well
as. I am working in an IT
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company and
I
am interested
in the
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share
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market
at that time the
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share
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market
was too low for COVID-19. In that time the
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market
,
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company
, bank was
totally
closed
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so
that the
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share
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continuously
was going to the low side. I
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thought
of one
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idea
to invest
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some
Rs. In the
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share
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market
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my
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father
did not
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agree
for that
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it was
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risky in the
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market
as per my dad
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thought
.
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But
I convinced him and I
were interested
in a few rs. Of Around 3 lakhs. After that
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market
and
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company
reopened and the
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market
was going to be Normal
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so
the
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share
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market
graph is going up side. We invested rs. Was triple in a couple of months. My parents are happy that I made a
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good
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decision
. After that we have no need to
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get
a loan for the car. I felt
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very
happy for making a
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good
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decision
for my family and my
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father
was
also
proud of me.

IELTS academic Describe a good decision you made recently What it was When you made it What the result was And explain how you felt about it

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2 paragraphs
279 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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