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demonstrates the changes in Consumption of Fast Food by Australian Teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

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The graph demonstrates the changes in Consumption of Fast Food by Australian Teenagers between 1975 and 2000. In general, the amount of pizza and consumed increased significantly while the amount of fish and chips fell. While the Consumption of pizza rose quickly between 1975 and 1995 and also the amount of hamburgers from 1975 to 1985. The main difference was that the amount of fish and chips it was fall then increase in 1980 then decreased significantly between 1985 and 2000.
The graph demonstrates the
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in Consumption of
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Food by Australian
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Teenagers
between 1975 and 2000.

In general
, the
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amount
of pizza and consumed increased
significantly
while the
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amount
of fish and chips fell. While the Consumption of pizza rose
quickly
between 1975 and 1995 and
also
the
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amount
of hamburgers from 1975 to 1985.

The main difference was that the
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of fish and chips it was fall then increase in 1980 then decreased
significantly
between 1985 and 2000.
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IELTS academic demonstrates the changes in Consumption of Fast Food by Australian Teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
81 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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