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death and medicine' funds

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The two graphs demonstrate the comparison between the spending on medical research and the number of victims who died because of six different diseases in Someland 1990. As transparent from the chart, the initial impression from the chart is the more money is spent on making vaccines and drugs, the fewer people would die from that disease. Further inspection reveals that researching AIDS has been hitting a peak of a marked 180 million dollars, almost 8 times of TB’ research fund but the number of deaths from AIDS is not the lowest. Consistent with the data in two bar graphs, tropical diseases and Leprosy had the same number of funds for medical research but Leprosy caused less death than any others, with an approximate figure of 0. 1 million deaths. In conclusion, the number of deaths is not entirely based on the amount of money spent on research in Someland.

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