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he three given maps illustrate the consolidation process of the small town of Headly village and Fonton city between 1925 and 1975 till present.

he three given maps illustrate the consolidation process of the small town of Headly village and Fonton city between 1925 and 1975 till present. Jq7r0
The three given maps illustrate the consolidation process of the small town of Headly village and Fonton city between 1925 and 1975 till present. Overall, it is clear that there are significant developments in size of both areas and the addition of other variety facilities after merging into one. Looking at the map in 1925, Headly village and Fonton city were quite small with only a main road and a train line divided for each place. But fifty years later, the old road was expanded into a dual carriageway. Various other developments with regard to leisure center, housing estate and local shop which accompanied the widening larger of this road. The second map witnessed the construction of another one-way which ran from the west to the east to combine the two separated areas into one. In terms of other changes we can see that at present, after connecting into one the local shop is replaced to make for way for a supermarket, while leisure center and housing estate stay unchanged. Moreover, the headly village changes to suburbs. Beside these, a big hotel and a railway station appear in the middle/ center of the layout. Finally, there is also an appearance of a business park which located in the bottom south of the map.
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that there are significant developments in size of both areas and the addition of other variety facilities after merging into one.

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in 1925,
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Headly
village and
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Fonton
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a main road and a train line divided for each place.
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was expanded
into a dual carriageway. Various other developments with regard to leisure center, housing estate and local shop which accompanied the widening larger of this road. The second
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witnessed the construction of another one-way which ran from the west to the east to combine the two separated areas into one.

In terms of other
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changes
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that at present, after connecting into one the local shop
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for way for a supermarket, while leisure center and housing estate stay unchanged.
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village
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to suburbs. Beside these, a
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hotel and a railway station appear in the middle/ center of the layout.
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IELTS academic he three given maps illustrate the consolidation process of the small town of Headly village and Fonton city between 1925 and 1975 till present.

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