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data about fish and different kind of meats in a European country from 1979 until 2004.

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The line graph shows data about fish and different kind of meats in a European country from 1979 until 2004. Overall, the chicken have been the dominated type of meat and will continue this trend in to the future. The fish and other kinds of meats such as beef and lamb have been represented rapidly and the line going to decrease and it is projected that it will continue like that to the future. The chicken command the biggest share with 145g in 1979. Raising to approximately 200 g in 1989. In addition, this trend is set to continue with a projected value of nearly 249g in 2004. Despite some fluctuation. The fish is almost level off with a little decrease it start with 60 g in 1979 to be 45g in 2004. However, the remaining meats, which are lamb, and beef they continue with rabidly decrease. The beef start 220g in 2979 and then it increased to reach the highest peak with 240g in 1984 and then it start in decreasing to be in 2004 with 100g. The lamb meat start with 150g in 1979 then 140g in 1988 and continue to unstable decrease to 60g in 2004. The unit was gram per person per week and we can notice that there is no big difference in using fish during the time but there is a dramatically change with the other meats.
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data about fish and
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different
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meats
in a European country from 1979 until 2004.

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meat
and will
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continue
this trend in to the future. The fish and other kinds of
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meats
such as beef and lamb have
been represented
rapidly
and the line going to
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decrease
and it
is projected
that it will
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continue
like that to the future.

The chicken command the biggest share with 145g in 1979. Raising to approximately 200 g in 1989.
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is set
to
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continue
with a projected value of
nearly
249g in 2004. Despite
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fluctuation.

The fish is almost level off with a
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little
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decrease
it
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start
with 60 g in 1979 to be 45g in 2004.
However
, the remaining
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meats
, which are lamb, and beef they
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with
rabidly
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decrease
. The beef
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start
220g in 2979 and then it increased to reach the highest peak with 240g in 1984 and then it
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start
in decreasing to be in 2004 with 100g. The lamb
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meat
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start
with 150g in 1979 then 140g in 1988 and
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to unstable
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decrease
to 60g in 2004.

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difference in using fish during the time
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IELTS academic data about fish and different kind of meats in a European country from 1979 until 2004.

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233 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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