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Consumption of four types of dairy product.

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The line graph illustrates how much consumption of several milk products which are cheese, full-fat ice cream, low-fat ice cream, yogurt in the USA over the 60 years. Overall,   although all figures were quite erratic, consumption of chicken and yogurt showed a dramatic rise over the period, meanwhile, two types of ice cream which are full-fat and low-fat, the former's consumption experienced a negligible decrease and the latter's intake oscillated at the same level. The amount of cheese eaten by people from the USA increase dramatically from about 7 pounds in 1970 to reach a peak of over 20 pounds in 2010.   Nevertheless, consumption of yogurt was unpopular in 1970, it witnessed a sharp increase from just over 0 to just under 10 pounds while next 40 years. In 40 years saw a negligible decrease, which is 2 pounds(from 11 to 9), in the full-fat ice cream intake. Meanwhile, the consumption of low-fat ice cream fluctuated at around 4 pounds over the period givens.
The line graph illustrates how much
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consumption
of several milk products which are cheese, full-
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fat
ice
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cream
, low-
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ice
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cream
, yogurt in the USA
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over
the 60 years.

Overall
,
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although all figures were quite erratic,
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consumption
of chicken and yogurt
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showed
a dramatic rise
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over
the period, meanwhile, two types of ice
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cream
which are full-
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fat
and low-
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fat
, the former's
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consumption
experienced a negligible decrease and the latter's intake oscillated at the same level.

The amount of cheese eaten by
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people
from the USA increase
dramatically
from about
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7 pounds
in 1970 to reach a peak of
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20 pounds
in 2010.
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Nevertheless
,
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of yogurt was unpopular in 1970, it witnessed a sharp increase from
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0 to
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10 pounds
while
next
40 years.

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a negligible decrease, which is
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2 pounds
(from 11 to 9), in the full-
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ice
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intake. Meanwhile, the
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of low-
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fluctuated at around
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4 pounds
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IELTS academic Consumption of four types of dairy product.

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4 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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