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Consumption of fast food in Maurititian

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The charts give the information about the numbers of fast food consumed by Mauritian Teenager in the period of 30 years from 1985 to 2015. Overall, there was an increase of consumption hamburgers and fried chicken meanwhile the opposite trend was true in using up pizza. In 1985, Pizza achieved the highest number of consumption with nearly 60 times per year, following by hamburgers and fried chicken were 10 times and under 10 times per year respectively. From 1985 to 2000, the numbers of fried chicken increased significantly with nearly 30 times. Noticeably, this exceeded quantity of hamburgers in 2000 and reached its peak at 60 times. In the end of period, quantity of fried chicken maintained the same rate till 2010 and achieved over 60 times in 2015. Likewise, hamburgers which were consumed by teenagers were upward and this ones became the highest fast food were popular in Mauritian teenagers in 2015 at 70 times per year. On the other hand, pizza was having the opposite trend and this underwent a sixfold fall in 2015 at nearly 10 times per years
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in the period of 30 years from 1985 to 2015.
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chicken meanwhile the opposite trend was true in using up pizza.

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, following by hamburgers and
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chicken were 10
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and under 10
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chicken maintained the same rate till 2010 and achieved over 60
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in 2015.
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food were popular in Mauritian
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IELTS academic Consumption of fast food in Maurititian

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181 words
6.0
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