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Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia

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The bar chart illustrates the outcome of a questionnaire about how often people buy and drink different types of coffee in five cities includes Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart. Overall, it is clear that the highest number of the survey is the percentage of city residents that went to a cafe for coffee or teas in last four weeks because it shows almost the highest proportion in three types. Looking into details, the statistic of consumerism in fresh coffee in four weeks period was always in the lowest rank. In Sydney, this number is 44% which is almost the same as in Melbourne. Brisbane and Adelaide share the same number of city residents, which is about 33%, a bit lower than Hobart. Talking about the rate of citizens buying instant coffee habit, Hobart shows the highest range with more than half of the population. Brisbane shares a similar feature with 52. 5% in detail. The other three cities have a lower percentage of residents follows descending order, Adelaide with 50%, Melbourne with 48%, and Sydney with 46%. Finally, the last collum of the chart shows the highest option in the coffee industry, percentage of those cities' residents went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks. 61% of Sydney civilians went to a coffee shop. Besides, Melbourne and Hobart have parallel features with above 65%. In Brisbane, this number is approximately 56%. People in Brisbane seem to not enjoy going out for coffee which takes only 49% in this category.
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includes Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart.

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of the survey is the percentage of city
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that went to a
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almost the highest proportion in three types.

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, the statistic of consumerism in fresh
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in four weeks period was always in the lowest rank. In Sydney, this
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is 44% which is almost the same as in Melbourne. Brisbane and Adelaide share the same
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of city
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, which is about 33%, a bit lower than Hobart.

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habit, Hobart
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the highest range with more than half of the population. Brisbane shares a similar feature with 52. 5% in detail. The other three
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follows descending order, Adelaide with 50%, Melbourne with 48%, and Sydney with 46%.

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industry, percentage of those cities'
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or tea in last four weeks. 61% of Sydney civilians went to a
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is approximately 56%.
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49% in this category.
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IELTS academic Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia

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