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Citizens expenditure in the uk

Citizens expenditure in the uk 8a3Dr
The given column graph illustrates investment in three sections among the five age groups in Britain. Overall, it is clear that food and drink are less consumed by younger people, in contrast, oldest aged people are most consumed it. At first, the Consumption of food and drink are significantly increased according to age. Secondly, although the expenditure on restaurant and hotel are gradually increased from under 30 to 46-60 age groups, expenditure on restaurant and hotel are sharp fallen in 61-75 age groups from 12% to 2%. Thirdly, spending on Entertainment are sharp fallen in the last age groups otherwise according to growing ages are rapidly escalated the spending. Meanwhile, 61-75 age groups are spent the lowest only 2%, on the other hand, those are under 30 age groups spent highest 14% and in 31-45 and 46-60 age groups level at 12% in Restaurant and Hotel
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column graph illustrates investment in three sections among the five
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age
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groups
in Britain.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that food and drink are less consumed by younger
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people
,
in contrast
,
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oldest
aged
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are most consumed it.

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first
, the Consumption of food and drink are
significantly
increased according to
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age
.
Secondly
, although the expenditure on restaurant and hotel are
gradually
increased from under 30 to 46-60
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age
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groups
, expenditure on restaurant and hotel are sharp fallen in 61-75
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age
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groups
from 12% to 2%.
Thirdly
, spending on Entertainment are sharp fallen in the last
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age
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groups
otherwise
according to growing
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ages
are
rapidly
escalated the spending.

Meanwhile, 61-75
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age
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groups
are spent
the lowest
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only
2%,
on the other hand
, those are under 30
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age
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groups
spent highest 14% and in 31-45 and 46-60
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age
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level at 12% in Restaurant and Hotel
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IELTS academic Citizens expenditure in the uk

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
145 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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