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cinema attendance in Britain:1984-2003

cinema attendance in Britain: 1984-2003 mb00r

The line graph reveals the rate of people in different age who visit cinema in UK from 1984 to 2003. According to the graph, the number of cinema visits is increased in every age categories. In 1984, the highest proportion of cinema visits was people in 15-24 years old at 18%. The figure climbed steadily to 35% by 1991, and hit two peaks between 1992 and 1996. After that, it continued rise and reached 55% in 2003, and its number was highest among all ages. Both the number of 15-24 age and the 25-34 age showed similar patterns during the period. In 1984, the percentage of 15-24 years old was 8%. Both numbers increased and finished 38% and 40%, respectively. This represented a huge increase in visits to cinema, especially among 25-34 years old. People who visits cinema among 7-14 years old is smallest number in both 1984 and 2003. It started 2% and finished 20%. However, the percentage is increased steadily.

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