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chocolate production method.

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The diagram above illustrates the chocolate production method. First of all, the chocolate comes from cacao trees in South America, Africa and/or Indonesia. When they are ready to harvest, they will have ripe red pods and these pods contain white cacao beans. Then, all of the white cacao beans are fermented in the very large boxes after removing the pods. Next. they are spread in the sun to dry and no moisture. The dry chocolate beans are put in large sacks. And transported to factory by train or lorry. When the beans are in factory, they are roasted at temperatures of up to 350 degrees Celsius. After roasting, they are crushed to remove outer shell. The obtained from this process will be taken to inner part pressed machine to make it liquefy. Ultimately, cacao beans from cacao trees in South America, Africa, and Indonesia are made into liquid chocolate.

The diagram above illustrates the chocolate production method.

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First of all
, the chocolate This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 from cacao trees in South America, Africa and/or Indonesia. When they are ready to harvest, they will have ripe red pods and these pods contain white cacao beans. Then, Consider using "all the".all the
all of the
 white cacao beans are fermented
 in the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 large boxes after removing the pods.

Next
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterThey
they
are spread
 in the sun to dry and no moisture.  The dry chocolate beans are put
 in large sacks. And transported to factory by train or lorry. When the beans are in factory, they are roasted
 at temperatures of up to 350 degrees Celsius.

After roasting, they are crushed
 to remove outer shell. The obtained from this process will be taken
 to inner part pressed machine to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 it liquefy.  Ultimately
, cacao beans from cacao trees in South America, Africa, and Indonesia are made
 into liquid chocolate. 