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changes the amount of fast food, which was consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000

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The line graph illustrates changes the amount of fast food, which was consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000 Overall, while the amount of fish and chips decreased. Interstingly, pizza and hamburgers overtook fish and chips to become the most consumed. But, hamburgers showed the highest result than others. As for fish and chips showed the same amount. The amount of fish and chips started at 100 in 1975 before decreasing to 85 in 1980. However, fish and chips consumption went up significantly to 95 in 1985, before decreased rapidly less than 40 in 2000. In terms of pizza and hamburger, these showed a similar pattern of rise. The amount of a hamburger consumption started at 5 in 1975 and went up dramatically to 85 in 1985. This amount rose slightly to 100 in 2000. Similarly, after the consumption of pizza started at 5 in 1975 and increased dramatically to 85 in 1995. It unchanged till in 2000
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