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changes of the Kimsville between 2002 and today

changes of the Kimsville between 2002 and today BMed9
The two maps reveal some changes which have taken place in Kimsville town between 2002 and today. The general trend is that, there has been some introductions of entertainment facilities such as pub and football stadium as well as some buildings serving for people. It is obvious that half of trees were cut down and replaced with new apartments at the northwest and with football stadium at the southwest of the map. The city centre has remained unchanged at the central of the map. The demolish of factory to the east of it has resulted in the erection of the software company. To the south of the city centre also witnessed the construction of the pub in place of the old cinema. Not only has the city centre stayed unaffected but also the shopping mall has not been moved. The present also experienced the brand new station which helps the citizen commute better. Also there are some tree at the northeastern side as well as the southeastern side of the map.
The two
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changes
which have taken place in
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Kimsville
town between 2002 and
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today
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The general trend is that, there has been
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some
introductions of entertainment facilities such as pub and football stadium
as well
as
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some
buildings serving for
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people
.

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cut
down and replaced with new apartments at the northwest and with football stadium at the southwest of the
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map
. The city
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centre
has remained unchanged at the central of the
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of factory to the east of it has resulted in the erection of the software
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company
. To the south of the city
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centre
also
witnessed the construction of the pub in place of the
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old
cinema.

Not
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has the city
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stayed unaffected
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also
the shopping mall has not been
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moved
. The present
also
experienced the
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station which
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helps
the citizen commute better.
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Also
there are
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tree at the northeastern side
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IELTS academic changes of the Kimsville between 2002 and today

Academic
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171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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