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The given diagram illustrates that billions of dollers earned per quarter by Microsoft, IBM and Apple from 2005 to 2007.

The given diagram illustrates that billions of dollers earned per quarter by Microsoft, IBM and Apple from 2005 to 2007. 25V1A
The given diagram illustrates that billions of dollers earned per quarter by Microsoft, IBM and Apple from 2005 to 2007. Firstly, Microsoft made a profit of nearly 1 billion dollars in Q1 2005 after it followed by a steady rise till the second quarter of 2006 and the earning reached 3. 5 billion dollars. After this, it fluctuates for next three quarters till first quarters of 2007. After this, it increased for the next two quarters and reached around 4. 2 billion dollars in Q3 2007 followed by a slight dip to 3. 8 billion dollars in Q4 2007. Secondly, IBM's benefits start from the graph was 0. 5 billion dollars in Q1 2005. In the second quarter of 2005, it picked profit around 1. 3 billion dollars. For next four quarters, it remained average change till Q1 2006. After the first quarter of 2006, it surges and touches profits of around 3 billion dollars in Q2 2006. Then, line falls and stop at the 1. 6 billion dollars in Q3 2006. For next three quarters, it stays with a small change to the Q1 2007. Again in the second quarter of 2007, it increased and make a profit of 3. 5 billion dollars. In the end, it fluctuated and stop at 2. 5 in Q4 2007. Lastly, Apple started profit at 0. 7 billion dollars from the Q1 2005 and grew with slow change till 2. 5 billion dollars in Q4 2006. Th it quickly reached to the benefit of approx 4 billion dollars in end of Q4 2007. Finally, all the companies raised their profits with change. However, the performance of Apple was extremely phenomenal.
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by Microsoft, IBM and Apple from 2005 to 2007.

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in Q1 2005 after it followed by a steady rise till the second
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of 2006 and the earning reached 3. 5
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. After this, it fluctuates for
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three
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till
first
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of 2007. After this, it increased for the
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two
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and reached around 4. 2
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in Q3 2007 followed by a slight dip to 3. 8
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in Q4 2007.

Secondly
, IBM's benefits
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from the graph was 0. 5
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in Q1 2005. In the second
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of 2005, it picked
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around 1. 3
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. For
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four
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, it remained average
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till Q1 2006. After the
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of 2006, it surges and touches
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in Q2 2006. Then, line falls and
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at the 1. 6
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three
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, it stays with a
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to the Q1 2007. Again in the second
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of 2007, it increased and
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of 3. 5
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. In the
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, it fluctuated and
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at 2. 5 in Q4 2007.

Lastly
, Apple
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at 0. 7
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from the Q1 2005 and grew with slow
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till 2. 5
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it
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in
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Finally
, all the
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raised their
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However
, the performance of Apple was
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