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Both graphs illustrate a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park in the present day.

Both graphs illustrate a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park in the present day. kgyEO
Both graphs illustrate a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park in the present day. Overall, most of the public park has changed and it even got underground car park. Only a few things did not change such as one rose garden and entrances. In 1920, the public park had a fountain and a stage for musicians in the center. Moreover, rose gardens and seats were placed around the corner of the park. The entrances to the park were to the south and north. To the north-east, the pond for water plants, to the south-east glasshouses were located respectively. Today, the present day, the fountain renovated into a large square-shaped rose garden, also it has seats on every side. The stage for musicians was removed, and the amphitheater for concerts facility was constructed instead. The children’s play area is located at the place where the pond used to be. Next to the children's playground, a cafe has been built. The pond for water plants has developed into a water feature which is in the north-east corner of the park. Furthermore, the Grange public park has developed an underground car park.
Both graphs illustrate a
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when it
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opened in 1920 and the same
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in the present day.

Overall
, most of the
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public
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has
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changed
and it even
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got
underground car
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.
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Only
a few things did not
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change
such as one rose garden and entrances.

In 1920, the
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public
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park
had a fountain and a stage for musicians in the center.
Moreover
, rose gardens and seats
were placed
around the corner of the
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park
. The entrances to the
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park
were to the south and north. To the north-east, the pond for water plants, to the south-east glasshouses
were located
respectively
.

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Today
, the present day, the fountain renovated into a large square-shaped rose garden,
also
it has seats on every side. The stage for musicians
was removed
, and the amphitheater for concerts facility
was constructed
instead
. The children’s play area
is located
at the place where the pond
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used
to be.
Next
to the children's playground, a
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cafe
has
been built
. The pond for water plants has developed into a water feature which is in the north-east corner of the
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park
.
Furthermore
, the Grange
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park
has developed an underground car
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park
.

IELTS academic Both graphs illustrate a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park in the present day.

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6.0
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