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bar graph is used, which depicts the top 10 countries in terms of production and consumption of electricity in 2014 year.

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In this bar graph is used, which depicts the top 10 countries in terms of production and consumption of electricity in 2014 year. Overall, it has been observed that the electricity in production and consumption in China is the highest and the lowest is the Korea republic in terms of production and consumption of electricity. According to the bar graph, china was on the lead or 1st rank of the production(5398kwh) and consumption(5322kwh) of the electricity and in wastage of the electricity it came after the united states(233kwh), India(172. 2kwh), Canada(119kwh), France(98. 3kwh), and Japan(79. 5kwh): because there was the difference in production and consumption was 76kwh. After Canada, the wastage of electricity was on decreasing slope from different countries to France, Brazil, and Korea republic. Russia was the 3rd rank country which involved in the production and consumption, but the 1st rank holder in the wastage of electricity(14kwh). Germany was the only country which was on 9th rank, on the contrary, it was one of the various countries in terms of high consumption(582. 5kwh) but less produce(582. 58kwh) of the electricity.
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in 2014 year.

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in China is the highest and the lowest is the Korea republic in terms of
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of electricity.

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rank
of the production(5398kwh) and consumption(5322kwh) of the
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electricity
and in wastage of the
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it came after the
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united states
(233kwh), India(172. 2kwh), Canada(119kwh), France(98. 3kwh), and Japan(79. 5kwh):
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because
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and
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was 76kwh. After Canada, the wastage of
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was on decreasing slope from
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to France, Brazil, and Korea republic.

Russia was the 3rd
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,
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the 1st
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holder in the wastage of electricity(14kwh). Germany was the
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which was on 9th
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