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Bar graph about industry

Bar graph about industry mWk2A

The bar chart illustrates the amount of people working in different industries that are relating to tourism such sports, travel, hotel, culture and food between 2009 to 2019. The figures are given in thousands. Overall, it can be seen that most of the company showed upward trends in the next 10 years except of culture. It is apparent that in 2009, employment in hotel and other accommodation accounted to be the highest, followed by sports and food, with the figures being 299. 2, 284. 7 and 284. 7 thousands, respectively. However, by next 10 years, there will be significant movement, the rate worker of food and sports rose dramatically from 357. 7 to 345. 7, with the former being the represented as the largest occupation. While, hotel showed an initial growth with approximately 6thousands accounting to be the third highest in 2019. Moving to travel and culture, these two categories had the least employees working in this industries with only 60. 9 and 82. 8, respectively. However in 2019, although culture faced a slight decline by five thousand, travel showed dramatic climbed by almost twice the amount of its original worker.

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people
 working in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 industries that are relating to tourism such sports, travel, hotel, culture and food Use "between" + "and" not "to."  Try this: "between 2009 and 2019".between 2009 and 2019
between 2009 to 2019
. The figures are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 in thousands.

Overall
, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that most of the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 upward trends in the next
 10 years except of culture.

It is apparent that in 2009, employment in hotel and other accommodation accounted to be the highest, followed by sports and food, with the figures being 299. 2, 284. 7 and 284. 7 thousands, respectively
. However
, by next
 10 years, there will be significant movement, the rate worker of food and sports rose dramatically
 from 357. 7 to 345. 7, with the former being the represented as the largest occupation. “While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
, hotel This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 an initial growth with approximately 6thousands accounting to be the third highest in 2019.

Moving to travel and culture, these two categories had the least employees working in Did you mean "these"?these
this
 industries with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 60. 9 and 82. 8, respectively
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 in 2019, although culture faced a slight decline by five thousand, travel This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 dramatic climbed by almost twice the amount of its original worker. 