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The bar chart compares export income in five categories between 2015 and 2016, while the table shows information about the percentage changes of incomes in different products that are being exported.

The bar chart compares export income in five categories between 2015 and 2016, while the table shows information about the percentage changes of incomes in different products that are being exported. 9519n
Overall, it is clear that in 2016, the exports value has a downward trend, as was in 2015. We can also see that the percentage changes in values have increased in almost every kind of goods. In 2016, the values in exports of petroleum products and engineered goods are nearly the same, at roughly $60 billion. But, the former was a bit higher than the latter. The figures for agricultural products and textiles were at a similar level with merely over $30 billion. In 2015, goods of petroleum have a peak at about $60 billion, and for the gems and jewellery, it remained at a similar level from 2015 to 2016 accounted for around 40%. But, on average, the earnings in 2016 is slightly higher than in 2015 and the majority is increased by comparing the figures in 2015, except the gems and jewellery products. There is only one product that experienced a drop-in percentage of values, gems and jewellery by 3% lower. By contrast, the other four types of exports have a rise in the percentage of values. However, agricultural products have increased the lowest by 0. 81%, followed by a 3% rise in petroleum products. And engineered goods got the second-highest percentage change by 8. 5%. The remaining ones are textiles, which is the highest among the 4, at just over 15%. .
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that in 2016, the exports
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has a downward trend, as was in 2015. We can
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that the
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in values have increased in almost every kind of
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goods
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In 2016, the values in exports of petroleum
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and engineered
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, the former was a bit higher than the latter. The figures for agricultural
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and textiles were at a similar level with
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of petroleum have a peak at about $60 billion, and for the gems and
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jewellery
, it remained at a similar level from 2015 to 2016 accounted for around 40%.
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, on average, the earnings in 2016 is
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higher than in 2015 and the majority
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jewellery
products.

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of values, gems and
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jewellery
by 3% lower. By contrast, the other four types of exports have a rise in the
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of values.
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, agricultural
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have increased the lowest by 0. 81%, followed by a 3% rise in petroleum
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. And engineered
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by 8. 5%. The remaining ones are textiles, which is the highest among the 4, at
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IELTS academic The bar chart compares export income in five categories between 2015 and 2016, while the table shows information about the percentage changes of incomes in different products that are being exported.

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