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The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. LBm8n
This graph shows changes in the popularity of three different activities in a UK sports club over a period of 20 years. In 1995 around 50% of club members participated in swimming, so this was clearly the most popular activity. However, this figure decreased steadily to 15% in 2010 and remained constant at this rate until 2015. In contrast, 32% of members did team sports in 1995, and this rate reached a peak of 40% in 2010 before dropping to its former level. Participation rates for team sports increased overtook those for swimming and became the highest for all activities from 2005 to 2015. Finally, participation in gym activities stood at only 5% in 1995, but this figure grew rapidly from 2000 to 2010, eventually levelling off at around 25%, making gym the second most popular activity. Overall, participation in swimming dropped considerably during the period. Team sports, however, remained popular, while participation in gym activities rose significantly over the period.
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club over a period of 20 years.

In 1995 around 50% of club members participated in swimming,
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to 15% in 2010 and remained constant at this rate until 2015.

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in 1995, and this rate reached a peak of 40% in 2010
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rates for team
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increased overtook those for swimming and became the highest for all
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activities
from 2005 to 2015.

Finally
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participation
in gym
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stood at
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5% in 1995,
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this figure grew
rapidly
from 2000 to 2010,
eventually
levelling off at around 25%, making gym the second most popular activity.

Overall
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participation
in swimming dropped
considerably
during the period. Team
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,
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, remained popular, while
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rose
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IELTS academic The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015.

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