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Bar chart shows married men and women in different categories spending time in unpaid jobs

Bar chart shows married men and women in different categories spending time in unpaid jobs lX5j1
The bar graph displays the amount of time spent by married men and women on unpaid jobs. The overall view depicts married women to have spent the highest amount of time on unpaid chores in contrast to their male counterparts. It is observed that the presence of children stupendously increases the time to be rendered to these jobs. Comparing married women with 3 or more children to females that do not have kids, it is evident that there is an appalling amount of difference in the workload and time spent, with the former category spending 60 hours a week and the latter just 30. Married women with 1 to 2 children spent 50 hours a week which is slightly less compared to the females with 3 or more children. Taking into account married men in all the presented categories, it can be derived that the amount of time spent is not only similar but also remains magnanimously unchanged which further emphasizes the astonishing gender gap in the contribution to unpaid jobs
The bar graph displays the
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on unpaid jobs.

The
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women
to have
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the highest
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of
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on unpaid chores
in contrast
to their male counterparts. It
is observed
that the presence of children
stupendously
increases the
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time
to
be rendered
to these jobs.

Comparing married
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women
with 3 or more children to females that do not have kids, it is evident that there is an appalling
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amount
of difference in the workload and
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time
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spent
, with the former category spending 60 hours a week and the latter
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30. Married
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women
with 1 to 2 children
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spent
50 hours a week which is
slightly
less compared to the females with 3 or more children.

Taking into account married
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men
in all the presented categories, it can
be derived
that the
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time
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is not
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only
similar
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also
remains
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unchanged which
further
emphasizes the astonishing gender gap in the contribution to unpaid jobs
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IELTS academic Bar chart shows married men and women in different categories spending time in unpaid jobs

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170 words
6.5
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