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The bar chart compares four different age groups in term of the percentage of total Internet users in Taiwan over 3 years. From an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that over the given period, adults between 16 and 50 made up the majority of Internet users in Taiwan. However, their share saw a gradual decline as more children and older people used the Internet. Taking a closer look at the bar chart, we can see that in 1998, young adults who were between 16 and 30 years of age made up the biggest group of Internet users in Taiwan, at 53%, followed by middle-aged people who were 31-50 years old, accounting for 41%. Over the next two years, the figures for these two age groups decreased gradually, reaching new lows of 44% and 37%, respectively. However, reverse patterns can be seen as regards the percentage of Internet users in Taiwan who were children and the elderly. By contrast, the two remaining age groups experienced reverse patterns. Specifically, at the beginning of the period shown, merely 2% and 4%. Less than 15 16-30 years 31 to 50 years 50 or more of total Internet users in Taiwan were children and the elderly, correspondingly. Nevertheless, by 1999, the figures for these two age groups had increased fourfold and twofold before witnessing a slight rise of 1% and 2% at the end of the given period
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percentage
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period, adults between 16 and 50 made up the majority of Internet

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users
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children
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that in 1998, young

adults who were between 16 and 30 years of
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made up the biggest

group of Internet
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users
in Taiwan, at 53%, followed by middle-aged

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people
who were 31-50 years
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, accounting for 41%.

Over the
next
two years, the figures for these two
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groups decreased
gradually
, reaching new lows of 44% and 37%,
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However
, reverse patterns can be
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seen
as regards the percentage of

Internet
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users
in Taiwan who were children and the elderly.

By contrast, the two remaining
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groups experienced reverse

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patterns
.

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in Taiwan were children and the elderly,
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IELTS academic bar chart of 4 different groups

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