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Bar Chart & Marriage & Divorce

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The bar chart depicts marriage and divorce rates in the USA for the years 1970, 1980, 1990 and 2000. This is accompanied by another bar chart illustrating the percentage of American adults who were married, never married, widowed and divorced in the years 1970 and 2000. As it can be seen from the bar chart, in the year 1970 there were 2. 5 million marriages and 1 million divorced people in the USA. In the next decade, the total number of married people remained the same as in the previous decade, however, the divorce rates were increased by 0. 4 million compared to 1970. In the year 1990, marriages decreased in number by 0. 25 million in comparison to the last two consecutive decades, likewise, divorce rates also dropped down to just above 1 million as compared to 1. 4 million in 1980. In 2000, there were 2 million married and 1 million divorced people in the USA In 1970, 70% of adults were married, 12% of the total adults, never married and 5% of widowed adults were present and a very negligible percentage of adults were divorced. On the other hand in 2000, the married population dipped by 10% in addition, 20% of adults never married and nearly 20% of divorced in 2000 as compared to the year 1970.
The bar chart depicts marriage and divorce rates in the USA for the years 1970, 1980, 1990 and 2000. This
is accompanied
by another bar chart illustrating the percentage of American
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adults
who
were married
, never married, widowed and
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divorced
in the years 1970 and 2000.

As it can be
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seen
from the bar chart, in the
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year
1970 there were 2. 5
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million
marriages and 1
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million
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divorced
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people
in the USA. In the
next
decade, the total number of married
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people
remained the same as in the previous decade,
however
, the divorce rates
were increased
by 0. 4
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million
compared to 1970. In the
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year
1990, marriages decreased in number by 0. 25
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million
in comparison
to the last two consecutive decades,
likewise
, divorce rates
also
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dropped down
to
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just
above 1
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million
as compared to 1. 4
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million
in 1980. In 2000, there were 2
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million
married and 1
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million
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divorced
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people
in the
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USA


In 1970, 70% of
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adults
were married
, 12% of the total
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adults
, never married and 5% of widowed
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adults
were present and a
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very
negligible percentage of
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adults
were
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divorced
.
On the other hand
in 2000, the married population dipped by 10%
in addition
, 20% of
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adults
never married and
nearly
20% of
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divorced
in 2000 as compared to the
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year
1970.
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IELTS academic Bar Chart & Marriage & Divorce

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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