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B & M Gadget Store ebook reader sales 2011

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The line graph indicates information about the number of ebook readers sales in Gadget Store in the months of 2011. In general, the chart above depicts the fluctuation trend over a one-year period. In the first three months of the year, the number of products sold increased slightly from 50 to 100 ebooks. Then, between April and June, the number of sales suddenly dropped by 40 units, from 100 to 60. Later, over the next three months, the appliance store resumed e-reader marketing, which grew dramatically and peaked at 130 of sales at the end of September. However, in the last three winter months of 2011, shopping ebook devices also fall back and reached the lowest point at 40 in December. That is the lowest of sold out of the year. Overall, sales in 2011 were fluctuated unevenly, heated in December lowest of 40 ebooks and a peaked of 130 in September.
The line graph indicates information about the number of
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ebook
readers
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sales
in Gadget Store in the
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months
of 2011.

In general
, the chart above depicts the fluctuation trend over a one-year period. In the
first
three
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months
of the year, the number of products sold increased
slightly
from 50 to 100
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ebooks
.

Then, between April and June, the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
suddenly
dropped by 40 units, from 100 to 60.

Later, over the
next
three
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months
, the appliance store resumed e-reader marketing, which grew
dramatically
and peaked at 130 of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sales
at the
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end
of September.

However
, in the last three winter
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months
of 2011, shopping
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ebook
devices
also
fall back and reached the lowest point at 40 in December.
That is
the lowest of sold out of the year.

Overall
,
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sales
in 2011
were fluctuated
unevenly
, heated in December lowest of 40
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ebooks
and
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a peaked of
130 in September.
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IELTS academic B & M Gadget Store ebook reader sales 2011

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