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AUSTRALIAN STUDENTS ATTENDING TO UNI

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The graphs provide information regarding the number of Australian students and foreign students that enrolled in Australian universities from the year 2000 to 2010. Overall, the total number of overseas students has dramatically grown in the decade under analysis while the figures for local students steadily grew during most of the decade but then it remained stable. The number of students commencing university have had a direct impact in the total numbers. For overseas students, the numbers doubled in the first half of the decade from approximately 10000 students in the year 2000 to 20000 in 2006. After that, the numbers doubled again by the year 2009 reaching a peak of 40000 overseas students commencing their studies. At the end of the decade the trend remained stable. For local students, there has been a fluctuation in the figures. While there was a peak in the year 2002 with more than 200000 students commencing university, after that there was a slightly downward trend that fluctuated below 200000. Since
The graphs provide information regarding the
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number
of Australian
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students
and foreign
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students
that enrolled in Australian universities from the
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year
2000 to 2010.
Overall
, the total
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number
of overseas
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students
has
dramatically
grown in the decade under analysis while the figures for local
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students
steadily
grew during most of the decade
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but
then it remained stable.

The
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number
of
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students
commencing university have had a direct impact in the total
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numbers
. For overseas
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students
, the
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numbers
doubled in the
first
half of the decade from approximately 10000
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students
in the
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year
2000 to 20000 in 2006. After that, the
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numbers
doubled again by the
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year
2009 reaching a peak of 40000 overseas
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students
commencing their studies. At the
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end
of the decade the trend remained stable.

For local
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students
, there has been a fluctuation in the figures. While there was a peak in the
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year
2002 with more than 200000
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students
commencing university, after that there was a
slightly
downward trend that fluctuated below 200000. Since

IELTS academic AUSTRALIAN STUDENTS ATTENDING TO UNI

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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