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The pie chart depicts how different activities affected the productivity of farmland all over the world. We also have the data of impact on three regions of the world. As we can see from the chart, over-grazing of farmland has impacted the most worldwide. It degraded 35% of total agricultural land. If we talk about regions, then in Oceania over-grazing has degraded 11. 3% of its croplands. It was almost 5. 5% for Europe. However, in America, total land degradation is just 5% of available over-grazing is the second most cause for degradation. Deforestation contributes 30% of the degradation. It has significantly less impact in North America and Oceania, i. e. , about 0. 2% and 1. 7% respectively on total land. However, in Europe, deforestation is the main contributor to wasting land. It impacts a total of 9. 8% of the available area. If we talk about over-cultivation, all over the world it has 28% impact. The good news is that in Oceania, over-cultivation is not a problem. However, in Europe and North America, this cause still has a massive impact of around 5. 5% and 3. 3%, respectively. Apart from the above causes, there are other few, but their overall impact is not as much as mentioned above. These other cause only 7% of total degradation to the available croplands.
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from the chart, over-grazing of farmland has impacted the most worldwide. It degraded 35% of
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. If we talk about regions, then in Oceania over-grazing has degraded 11. 3% of its croplands. It was almost 5. 5% for Europe.
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5% of available over-grazing is the second most
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in North America and Oceania,
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of 9. 8% of the available area.

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