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The map shows the library of 2001 and 2009.

The map shows the library of 2001 and 2009. b29AB
The given to maps illustrate the outline depicting what the library looked like in 2001 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that a plethora of changes had done on the ground floor. Moreover, a principal modification was the addition of children area and the extra sections for books. Looking at the graph in more detail in 2001 on the left side there were self help and history section, while numerous other facilities added after 8 years such as kitchen, economics and law. Moreover, fiction shelf was moved to place children's books. Besides this, right side section of newspapers and periodicals removed to provide film and DVDs section. Furthermore, near this movies and DVDs area computers were put. Apart from this, tables which were placed in the centre, merged with each other in a single row and children's area opened near it. However, some amenities remained unchanged on the ground floor of a library such as the entrance, a librarian's desk and the stairs.
The
given
to maps illustrate the outline depicting what the library looked like in 2001 and 2009.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that a plethora of
changes
had done on the
ground floor
.
Moreover
, a principal modification was the addition of children area and the extra
sections
for books.

Looking at the graph in more detail in 2001 on the
left
side there were self
help
and history
section
, while numerous other facilities
added
after 8 years such as kitchen, economics and law.
Moreover
, fiction shelf was
moved
to place children's books.
Besides
this, right side
section
of newspapers and periodicals removed to provide film and DVDs
section
.
Furthermore
, near
this
movies and DVDs area computers
were put
. Apart from this, tables which
were placed
in the
centre
, merged with each other in a single row and children's area opened near it.

However
,
some
amenities remained unchanged on the
ground floor
of a library such as the entrance, a librarian's desk and the stairs.
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164 words
6.0
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