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amount earned by graduates of different age groups Gr61e
The graph illustrates some information about the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. Overall, the amount earned by higher and first degree of different ages between 21-60 showed an upward trend. On the other hand, the amount earned by others degree in the age of 51-60 was fell slightly from above 700 pounds earned by the age 46-50 to approximately 690 pounds earned by the age 56-60. However, the amount earned by all graduates rose from the age 21-40 from around 400 pounds to 700-800 pounds. But in the age of 40-55 there were slightly downward trends. In the first degree we can see that the lowest amount earned was around 680 pounds and increased around 10 pounds as the highest income at the age of 56-60 which has a similar trend with higher degree. We could conclude from the graphic that a higher degree has the highest income at the age 56-60.
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700 pounds
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690 pounds
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400 pounds
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680 pounds
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10 pounds
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of 56-60 which has a similar trend with higher
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IELTS academic amount earned by graduates of different age groups

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