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Advantages for students and society for putting students into two streams at young age of fifteen: Academic and vocational

Advantages for students and society for putting students into two streams at young age of fifteen: Academic and vocational PM3XJ
Nowadays, There is a lot of competition in each sector of our daily life. A number of nations are dividing their education system into two categories where students can have option to choose their stream for study. They can choose from academic or vocational to get a head start for the future. First, the main benefit this idea will bring to the students is that they can plan their career path accordingly. Not all the students are bright in their academic performances, for them choosing vocational path might be a better solution. There are lots of reputable jobs that do not require higher studies like plumbing, electrician etcetera, however, these professions provides really good wages to have better life. Moreover, young ones will be much confident in their life when they know what they are going to do in the future. In addition, it will save their valuable time too, and they can get trained well in profession of choice instead of wasting time on studies that might not be beneficial for their field. On the other hand, Society will also gain from this idea. Families can save numerous money from their kids unnecessary higher studies if they plan about their profession in advance. Furthermore, Community will have young trained workforce full of new ideas and energy, that will help the capital in bigger gains. In addition, Government will know where to use their resources when they are aware about their youth interests. In conclusion, we can say that this will be extremely wise decision for any nation to introduce this kind of education system where pupils can have options to pick their job related studies.
Nowadays, There is
a lot of
competition in each sector of our daily life. A number of nations are dividing their education system into two categories where students can have option to choose their stream for
study
. They can choose from academic or vocational to
get
a head
start
for the future.

First
, the main benefit this
idea
will bring to the students is that they can plan their career path
accordingly
. Not all the students are bright in their academic performances, for them choosing vocational path might be a better solution. There are lots of reputable jobs that do not require higher
studies
like plumbing, electrician etcetera,
however
, these professions provides
really
good
wages to have better life.
Moreover
, young ones will be much confident in their life when they know what they are going to do in the future.
In addition
, it will save their valuable time too, and they can
get
trained well in profession of choice
instead
of wasting time on
studies
that might not be beneficial for their field.

On the other hand
, Society will
also
gain from this
idea
. Families can save numerous money from their kids unnecessary higher
studies
if they plan about their profession in advance.
Furthermore
, Community will have young trained workforce full of new
ideas
and energy, that will
help
the capital in bigger gains.
In addition
,
Government
will know where to
use
their resources when they are aware about their youth interests.

In conclusion
, we can say that this will be
extremely
wise decision for any nation to introduce this kind of education system where pupils can have options to pick their job related
studies
.
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IELTS academic Advantages for students and society for putting students into two streams at young age of fifteen: Academic and vocational

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