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academic writing task 1 describe pie charts

academic writing task 1 describe pie charts KwEQ3
The data provides information about the proportion of the various nutrients which may affect health if it was over-consumed in four different meals in the USA. The figure is given in percentage and can be divided into two groups which are sodium and saturated fat, and added sugar. Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of people who consume both sodium and saturated fat in dinner was the highest, while breakfast contained the lowest nutrients. Noticeably, there was a similar pattern in both sodium and saturated fat in dinner, which was the highest amount accounted for 43% and 37%, respectively. Moreover, sodium followed by over a quarter of people consumed and 25% of saturated fat in lunch. The share of saturated fat in snacks ranked third with constituted 21%. Furthermore, there was a small portion in breakfast, which made up 16%. However, the amount of sodium was the same between snacks and breakfast at 14%. Moving to added sugar, there was nearly a half in snacks, which was the majority portion. The consuming share in lunch double less than snacks at 23%. In addition, there were almost a fifth of lunch and breakfast, which are responsible for 19%, and 16%, respectively.
The data provides information about the proportion of the various nutrients which may affect health if it was over-consumed in four
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different
meals in the USA. The figure is
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given
in percentage and can
be divided
into two groups which are sodium and
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saturated
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fat
, and
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added
sugar.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the percentage of
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people
who consume both sodium and
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saturated
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fat
in dinner was the highest, while
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breakfast
contained the lowest nutrients.

Noticeably
, there was a similar pattern in both sodium and
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saturated
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fat
in dinner, which was the highest amount accounted for 43% and 37%,
respectively
.
Moreover
, sodium followed by over a quarter of
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people
consumed and 25% of
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saturated
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fat
in lunch. The share of
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saturated
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fat
in
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snacks
ranked third with constituted 21%.
Furthermore
, there was a
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small
portion in
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breakfast
, which made up 16%.
However
, the amount of sodium was the same between
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snacks
and
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breakfast
at 14%.

Moving to
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added
sugar, there was
nearly
a half in
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snacks
, which was the majority portion. The consuming share in lunch double less than
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snacks
at 23%.
In addition
, there were almost a fifth of lunch and
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breakfast
, which are responsible for 19%, and 16%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic academic writing task 1 describe pie charts

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
202 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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