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above table shows details of rail transport of four countries based on 3 criteria in 2007.The three criteria are based on who use the railways, how many kilometres each person travels on average, and the number of tons of cargo the railways carry.

above table shows details of rail transport of four countries based on 3 criteria in 2007. The three criteria are based on who use the railways, how many kilometres each person travels on average, and the number of tons of cargo the railways carry. x2yy6
The above table shows details of rail transport of four countries based on 3 criteria in 2007. The three criteria are based on who use the railways, how many kilometres each person travels on average, and the number of tons of cargo the railways carry. According to the data, 27 million people used rail transport in china, compared to the 5-6 million people used railway in Malaysia and UAE. No more than 0. 3 million Canadian used the railway in 2007 which is the least among other countries. The distance travelled by each person in these four countries was similar to the number of people using railways in which Canada was in the last. Interestingly, the cargoes carried by the four countries Canada had the highest cargo carried out and the least country was UAE. In Summary, Chinese population used railways more than other countries except in cargo section which was carried out more in Canada.
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of rail transport of four
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based on 3 criteria in 2007. The three criteria
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each person travels on average, and the number of tons of
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According to the data, 27 million
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rail transport in
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china
, compared to the 5-6 million
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in Malaysia and UAE. No more than 0. 3 million Canadian
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in 2007 which is the least among other
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. The distance travelled by each person in these four
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was similar to the number of
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using
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in which Canada was in the last.
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carried by the four
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Canada had the highest
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carried out and the least
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was UAE.

In Summary, Chinese population
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used
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railways
more than other
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section which
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out more in Canada.

IELTS academic above table shows details of rail transport of four countries based on 3 criteria in 2007. The three criteria are based on who use the railways, how many kilometres each person travels on average, and the number of tons of cargo the railways carry.

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