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A survey conducted for the places in which people gain access to the Internet from 1998 to 2004.

A survey conducted for the places in which people gain access to the Internet from 1998 to 2004. GJDb2
The bar chart given information about four places where people can go online betweem 1998 to 2004. Overall, it is evident that most users accessed the internet at home during the preriod of 4 years. The percentage of people used internet at work declined noticebly while the rate of users used internet in the college and at the library remained stable. In 1998, more than half of people (53%) used internet at home while the proportion of people accessed the internet at the library only accounted for exactly 10%. One fifth of the users went online at the college and this figure at work was slightly higher, which was 28%. After 6 years, in 2004, the rate of internet users at home reached the peak of 55%, after a slight drop to around 45% in 2000. The proportion of people using the internet at the college and at work drecresed to 18% and 10% respectively. Although the users accessed the internet in the library went up slightly too but it stayed steadily at approximately 13% after 6 - year period of time.
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information about four places where
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can go online
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betweem
1998 to 2004.

Overall
, it is evident that most
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users
accessed the internet at home during the
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preriod
of 4 years. The percentage of
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people
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used
internet at work declined
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noticebly
while the rate of
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users
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used
internet in the college and at the library remained stable.

In 1998, more than half of
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people
(53%)
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used
internet at home while the proportion of
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people
accessed the internet at the library
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only
accounted for exactly 10%. One fifth of the
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users
went online at the college and this figure at work was
slightly
higher, which was 28%.

After 6 years, in 2004, the rate of internet
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users
at home reached the peak of 55%, after a slight drop to around 45% in 2000. The proportion of
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people
using the internet at the college and at work
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drecresed
to 18% and 10%
respectively
. Although the
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users
accessed the internet in the library went up
slightly
too
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but
it stayed
steadily
at approximately 13% after 6
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-
year period of time.
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IELTS academic A survey conducted for the places in which people gain access to the Internet from 1998 to 2004.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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