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A graph shows the consumption of meat of different animals and flesh of fish of European nations.

A graph shows the consumption of meat of different animals and flesh of fish of European nations. 0aomG
The beef is highly consume meat in year 1979 in coming year the demand drops in1980 but it shows sudden spike in eating till 1984. The consumption is showing varying as per the market but in outer perspective the demand of beef is continuous decrease and become least in year 2002-2003 that is less than 100 gram/ person in a week. Lamb shows it highest utilization in 1979 of 150 gram/ person in a week. In year 1984 lamb see the little rise and break the stable demand. In year 2000 lamb get to it least usage of 50 gram/ person a week. In year 1979 chicken was eaten less than beef but in financial year 1986-1987 the growth rate of chicken overpass the beef and put it on the top most favourable food to eat. In year 2003 chicken show the highest demand of 250 grams/person/7 days. Fish is the least thing like to eat, it is always behind all the meat production in the list. The highest demand was at year 1979 and slightly getting on decrease till 2004 but it not shows very consistent variation in utilization. Overall, the chicken is becoming more favourite item to eat of all and popularity of fish is least of all.
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meat in
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1979 in coming
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drops in1980
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sudden spike in eating till 1984. The consumption is showing varying as per the market
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in outer perspective the
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of
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is continuous decrease and become least in
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year
2002-2003
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less than 100 gram/ person in a week.

Lamb
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shows
it
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utilization in 1979 of 150 gram/ person in a week. In
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1984 lamb
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rise and break the stable
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. In
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2000 lamb
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usage of 50 gram/ person a week.

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In
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1979 chicken
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beef
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in financial
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1986-1987 the growth rate of chicken overpass the
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beef
and put it on the top most
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favourable
food to eat.
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In
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2003 chicken
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show
the highest
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demand
of 250 grams/person/7 days.

Fish is the least thing like to eat, it is always behind all the meat production in the list. The highest
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demand
was at
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1979 and
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getting on decrease till 2004
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it not
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consistent variation in utilization.

Overall
, the chicken is becoming more
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favourite
item to eat of all and popularity of fish is least of all.
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IELTS academic A graph shows the consumption of meat of different animals and flesh of fish of European nations.

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