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5.5 yarimdan is a boy or a girl in the world of a children's charity in the

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The prediction of line graph shows data about the percentage of people who aged 65 and over, over a century from to 1940 to 2040 in three various countries. Overall, it can be seen that all the proportion of seniors is far lower than the future results. Despite showing the lowest results, it is estimated that the seniors in Japan will be the best among the others in 2040. It is clear that the percentage of seniors in the USA and Sweden showed less significant growth, with just under 10% and over 5% in 1940. The figure then had been similar each other until 1990, by a considerable rise and drop. Having showed fluctuation between 1990 and 2020, then Sweden's seniors will rise dramatically, reaching just 25% in 2040. However, the number of seniors in the USA will be ranked third with just 23% in 2040. In contrast, the proportion of seniors in Japan witnessed just 5% in 1940. Having dropped slightly to 4% in 1960, the figure then remained stable. After that, the number of people who aged 65 and over has increased remarkably to 10% until 2025. By 2040, it will rise to 26% in 2040, this number being the peak level of the population of who aged 65 and over.
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who aged 65 and
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,
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a century from to 1940 to 2040 in three various countries.

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, it can be
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that all the proportion of
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seniors
is far lower than the future results. Despite showing the lowest results, it
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that the
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seniors
in Japan will be the best among the others in 2040.

It is
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clear
that the percentage of
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seniors
in the USA and Sweden
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showed
less significant growth, with
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under 10% and
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5% in 1940. The figure then had been similar each other until 1990, by a considerable rise and drop. Having
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showed
fluctuation between 1990 and 2020, then Sweden's
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will rise
dramatically
, reaching
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just
25% in 2040.
However
, the number of
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seniors
in the USA will
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third with
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just
23% in 2040.

In contrast
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seniors
in Japan witnessed
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just
5% in 1940. Having dropped
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to 4% in 1960, the figure then remained stable. After that, the number of
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people
who aged 65 and
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has increased
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IELTS academic 5. 5 yarimdan is a boy or a girl in the world of a children's charity in the

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  American English
4 paragraphs
213 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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