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The given chart depicts the key data of the old people aged 65 and over in 1988 and 2000, also its forecast in 2030 in Canada, Germany, and the UK.

The given chart depicts the key data of the old people aged 65 and over in 1988 and 2000, also its forecast in 2030 in Canada, Germany, and the UK. nxLRn
The given chart depicts the key data of the old people aged 65 and over in 1988 and 2000, also its forecast in 2030 in Canada, Germany, and the UK. As is observed, what stands out from the chart is that the table shows the overall positive trend in all of the categories. During the 42-year-period, the biggest alteration was always recorded by Germany. In 1988, the population aged 65 and above in Canada was 16%, the figure for Germany and UK was 20% and 14%, respectively. After 12 years, the demographic of Canada rapidly rose to 21%, whereas Germany and UK had a significant increase to 25% and 15%. respectively. Turning to the remaining year, the proportion of the three countries will gradually grow. Canada is predicted that it will climb to 26%. Show a similar pattern, Germany and UK will experience a significant increase to 30% and 20%, respectively.
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aged 65 and over in 1988 and 2000,
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its forecast in 2030 in Canada, Germany, and the UK.

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, what stands out from the chart is that the table
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overall
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positive
trend in
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categories. During the 42-year-period, the biggest alteration was always recorded by Germany.

In 1988, the population aged 65 and above in Canada was 16%, the figure for Germany and UK was 20% and 14%,
respectively
. After 12 years, the demographic of Canada
rapidly
rose to 21%, whereas Germany and UK had a significant increase to 25% and 15%.
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respectively
.

Turning to the remaining year, the proportion of the three countries will
gradually
grow. Canada
is predicted
that it will climb to 26%.
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Show
a similar pattern, Germany and UK will experience a significant increase to 30% and 20%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The given chart depicts the key data of the old people aged 65 and over in 1988 and 2000, also its forecast in 2030 in Canada, Germany, and the UK.

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