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The maps show changes the Happy Vally Shopping center from 1982 to 2012

The maps show changes the Happy Vally Shopping center from 1982 to 2012 VP8Km
The two maps show the main changes which took place in the Happy Vally Shopping center between the year 1982 and 2012. In general, it appears that Happy Vally Shopping center became a much more modern center, with Furniture Retail and entertainment facilities. One interesting change is that in 1982, Electronics store in the east of the center was knocked down, but Themed restaurants was built in 2012. Another striking change is that Food store in the north-west area of the center was disappeared in 1982, however a new food store was constructed on the other side of the center in 2012. In 1982 Furniture store and Coffee shop near the Lobby area were demolished. If we look at the west area of the center, Lake was replaced to the Furniture Retail in 2012. A final interesting development is that in 1982, lots of trees were cut down, however a complately new Parking Lot in the south-west of the center was constructed.
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Shopping center between the year 1982 and 2012.
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Vally
Shopping center became a much more modern center, with Furniture Retail and entertainment facilities. One interesting
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change
is that in 1982, Electronics
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in the east of the center
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Themed restaurants
was built
in 2012. Another striking
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is that Food
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in the north-west area of the center
was disappeared
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however
a new food
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was constructed
on the other side of the center in 2012. In 1982 Furniture
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and Coffee shop near the Lobby area
were demolished
. If we look at the west area of the center, Lake
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new Parking Lot in the south-west of the center
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