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The bar chart provides information on the percentage of overweight or obese adults

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The bar chart provides information on the percentage of overweight or obese adults in one country from 1965 to 2015, whereas the pie chart provides data on the adult population's weight range in 2015. It is clear from the bar chart that the percentage of overweight or obese adults increased between 1965 and 2015, from around 47% to almost 75%. The pie chart reveals that in 2015 over 70% of adults were too heavy. According to a bar chart, it can be seen that adults of overweight or obese from 1965 to 1985 was between 40% to 50%. the number of adults who are overweight or obese from 1995 to 2015 all rose in the range of 60% to approximately 75%. Moving to the pie chart, it is clear that the weight range of the obese adult population was the highest with 34%. The severely obese adult population weight range was the lowest with 6%.
The bar
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provides information on the percentage of
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overweight
or
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obese
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adults
in one country from 1965 to 2015, whereas the pie
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chart
provides data on the adult population's weight
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range
in 2015.

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from the bar
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that the percentage of
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overweight
or
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obese
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adults
increased between 1965 and 2015, from around 47% to almost 75%. The pie
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chart
reveals that in 2015 over 70% of
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adults
were too heavy.

According to a bar
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, it can be
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that
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adults
of
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overweight
or
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obese
from 1965 to 1985 was between 40% to 50%.
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the
number of
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adults
who are
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overweight
or
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obese
from 1995 to 2015 all rose in the
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range
of 60% to approximately 75%.

Moving to the pie
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chart
, it is
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clear
that the weight
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of the
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obese
adult population was the highest with 34%. The
severely
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obese
adult population weight
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was the lowest with 6%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart provides information on the percentage of overweight or obese adults

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