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4) The plans show changes to the layout of a theatre between 2010 and 2012 (23/1/2021).

4) The plans show changes to the layout of a theatre between 2010 and 2012 (23/1/2021). gDmxL
The presented map give information about the theatre was in 2010 at the left-hand map and the right-hand map illustrates how it looked like in 2012. In general, it is clear that significant changes were experienced in this theatre after the redesigned period. Especially, the size of the theatre was enlarged in 2012. As can be seen from the maps, the ticket office was moved from the left of the main entranece to the right, replacing the cafe in 2012. Besides, restaurants were added on the left-hand main door in 2012. Additionally, the admin office was scaled down and directly opposite the restaurants. As a part of the extension for the building in 2012, a storage was moved to the right to make a place for a media consisting of showers. In addition, the hall was erected at the top of the building where there was a media formerly. While stage in front of the hall was expanded, the auditorium saw no major changes in 2012.
The presented
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map
give information about the
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theatre
was in 2010 at the
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left
-hand
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map
and the right-hand
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map
illustrates how it looked like in 2012.

In general
, it is
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clear
that significant
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changes
were experienced
in this
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theatre
after the redesigned period.
Especially
, the size of the
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theatre
was enlarged
in 2012.

As can be
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seen
from the
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maps
, the ticket office was
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moved
from the
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left
of the main
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entranece
to the right, replacing the
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cafe
in 2012.
Besides
, restaurants were
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added
on the
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left
-hand main door in 2012.
Additionally
, the admin office
was scaled
down and
directly
opposite the restaurants.

As a part of the extension for the building in 2012, a storage was
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moved
to the right to
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make
a place for
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a media
consisting of showers.
In addition
, the hall
was erected
at the top of the building where
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there was a media
formerly
. While stage in front of the hall
was expanded
, the auditorium
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saw
no major
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changes
in 2012.
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IELTS academic 4) The plans show changes to the layout of a theatre between 2010 and 2012 (23/1/2021).

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166 words
6.0
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