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4. The charts show degrees granted in different fields at National University of Singapore in 1995, 2005 and 2015.

4. The charts show degrees granted in different fields at National University of Singapore in 1995, 2005 and 2015. rGpNl
The given pie charts compare the four different degrees that awarded to the students at National university of Sinapore in 3 decades/ in the span of 3 decades, commencing from 1995. As can be seen from the graph, more students were granted Computer science degrees while Business graduates decreased over the time. The illustration indicates that both Computer science and business diplomas were achived by 30% of students in 1995 at the National university. Following that, the proportion of Computer Science graduates experienced a marketed increase, while proportion of business graduates dropped by half over time. Particularly, Computer Science graduates reaches 45% in 2015 after booming 35 % in 2010, remaining its highest position. On the contrary, business graduates witnessed a corresponding decline, acounted for 35 %. In the interium, an identical pattern was followed by ratio of awarded graduates in both Law and Medicine field/ department. In the case of Medicine, the proportion of granted graduates was nearly a quarter during 1995 and 2015, but by 2015, it had risen to 30%. Moreover, 10% in 2010 and slightly higher in other two decades.
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degrees that awarded to the students at National university of
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Sinapore
in 3 decades/ in the span of 3 decades, commencing from 1995.

As can be
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seen
from the graph, more students
were granted
Computer
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science
degrees while
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Business
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graduates
decreased over the time.

The illustration indicates that both Computer
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science
and
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business
diplomas were
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achived
by 30% of students in 1995 at the National university. Following that, the proportion of Computer
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Science
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graduates
experienced a marketed increase, while proportion of
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business
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graduates
dropped by half over time.
Particularly
, Computer
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Science
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graduates
reaches 45% in 2015 after booming 35 % in 2010, remaining its highest position.
On the contrary
,
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business
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graduates
witnessed a corresponding decline,
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acounted
for 35 %.

In the
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interium
, an identical pattern
was followed
by ratio of awarded
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graduates
in both Law and Medicine field/ department. In the case of Medicine, the proportion of granted
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graduates
was
nearly
a quarter during 1995 and 2015,
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by 2015, it had risen to 30%.
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, 10% in 2010 and
slightly
higher in other two decades.

IELTS academic 4. The charts show degrees granted in different fields at National University of Singapore in 1995, 2005 and 2015.

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