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Story of a sailor in England

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I was a sailor and a great merchant in one of the cities of England One day, as usual, I was traveling at sea with my partner, but unfortunately he betrayed me and threw me into the sea and sailed away. Finally, after hours of swimming and being alone, hungry and thirsty I went to the land I saw in the far distance. I had seen almost all the islands in the world, but this one was very strange and unknown, I thought I discovered something suddenly I heard a sound from behind the palms. I hid behind the bushes it was there someone appeared (i almost had a stroke, don't worry, I'm still alive and I will continue the rest of the story) I became upset because I was not the explorer of the island but I'm happy because I'm not lonely I went ahead and introduced myself to the man, but just cold as ice and There was a wave of hatred in his eyes I tried so hard to communicate with him, but every time he disappointed me, he was cold hearted and an unfriendly guy finally I asked him why he has a sense of aversion, well his answer just shoked me he said Several partners betrayed him and the last one backes to a long time ago, when his last partner betrayed him and left him alone on the island and went with the treasures they found, since then he hate everyone and he can not easily trust. When I heard this, I also explained the reason why I came to this island. Ultimately, we trust each other and by using the treasures of the island we turned it into the best island on the continent.

I was a sailor and a great merchant in one of the cities of England

One day, as usual, I was traveling at sea with my partner, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 unfortunately he betrayed me and threw me into the sea and sailed away. Finally
, after hours of swimming and being alone, hungry and thirsty I went to the land I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 in the far distance.

I had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 almost all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
islands
 in the world, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this one was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 strange and unknown, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 I discovered something

suddenly
 I heard a sound from behind the palms. I hid behind the bushes it was there someone appeared (Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 almost had a stroke, don't worry, I'm still
 alive and I will continue the rest of the story)

I became upset This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I was not the explorer of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I'm happy This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I'm not Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphlonely.lonely!lonely?lonely:lonely,lonely;
lonely


Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 went ahead and introduced myself to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualresidentcitizen
man
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chillyfrosty
cold
 as ice and There was a wave of hatred in his eyes

I tried so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 to communicate with him, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 every time he disappointed me, he was This word is normally spelled with hyphen.cold-hearted
cold hearted
 and an unfriendly
 guy

finally
 I asked him why he has a sense of aversion, well
 his answer This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
Possible spelling mistake found.showedshockedsmokedchokedshovedstoked
shoked
 me he said Several partners betrayed him and the last one Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "backs", the plural form of the noun 'back'?backsbackedbackersbackerBackusbakes
backes
 to a long time ago, when his last partner betrayed him and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 him alone on the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accompanied
went with
 the treasures they found,

since The comma is probably missing here: "then, he".then, he
then he
 hate Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).everyone, and
everyone and
 he can not easily
 trust. When I heard this, I also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpreted
explained
 the reason why I came to this island.

Ultimately
, we trust each other and by using the treasures of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
 we turned it into the best You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
 on the continent. 