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On October 4th 1957, the whole world witnessed the launch of Sputnik satellite which was done with the help of the rocket R-7 ICBM from tyuratam launch base in the Kazakh Republic. Sputnik was the worlds first artificial satellite and it was named after the Russian word for “satellite” and was launched by the Soviet Union. The successful launch of Sputnik ushered in what has been described as the “space age”, after which we have witnessed many successful launches into space, and also expanded our knowledge about the outer world. We have come a long way since then, from a satellite launch to one of sending humans to Mars in less than 70 years is no easy feat, the advancement in technology has gone leaps and bounds and the only thing limiting us right now is our own self. With major contributions from scientists such as Wernher Von Braun, who was treated as a pioneer in the aerospace field, alongside the legendary engineer Robert Goddard who built the world’s first liquid-fuelled rocket, and the man who lived the dream of every child; Neil Armstrong first man ever to land on the moon. These stories inspire everyone and these people become the source of inspiration. To contribute to this field and maybe one day become one of these people in the inspiring stories, I want to pursue my Master’s Degree in Aerospace Engineering at *** University. I was always an avid reader of books and I still am, but nonfictional novels never really caught my interest and it wasn’t until I was in my 8th standard and I got my hands on “Wings of Fire” it is the autobiography of APJ Abdul Kalam who is also known as missile man of India. I was very sceptical before reading the book but when I started reading it I couldn’t put it down. He was the man responsible for India making rapid inroads into the aerospace industry at a time when many people wouldn’t have even given India a chance to launch rockets. After I had finished his autobiography I realized what a brilliant man he was and how much he inspired me by his words and that someday even a daydreaming kid like me would also be associated with the same field that he had practiced in. When I was in 10th class there was a chapter in physics called “Light” which gave me a brief idea about space exploration using telescopes and how much of our universe was still unexplored, looking back I think that was the final straw that really pushed me into making aerospace as my future. I went to school and had a lengthy discussion with physics teacher, and he with much patience answered me the best he could. I came back home satisfied but my eagerness to learn more and more about this subject only grew. With this my mindset I started my Btech Degree in Aerospace where I had various core subjects which include Jet Propulsion, Aircraft Stability and Control, Composite Materials and Structures, Rockets and Missiles, Space Mechanics, Control Theory and few others but I was more interested in the Composite Materials and Structures and Space Mechanics classes. These were the two subjects which really piqued my interest more than and I wanted to do good in these subjects and learn as much as I possibly could, these two subjects highlighted my 4 years degree here as they had many interesting topics which kept feeding my curiosity and my inquiring mind with solutions which kept me invested in learning the subject. The practical classes gave me a new experience and understanding of the things that I only read about in the classes or online. I initially struggled in Thermodynamics and Propulsion, I also ended up failing in Thermodynamics in a semester but I backed myself to do better. In the subsequent semester I had Propulsion and I put in a lot of hard work as I have trouble in that subject and I was able to clear it. Propulsion and Thermodynamics have taught me to challenge myself and be better and to learn from my failures and tackle the difficult situations face on. In the sixth semester of my undergraduate, I had the opportunity to attend a class called Design Project in which I along with two more students had to design a aircraft of our choosing from scratch. We decided to select a more challenging aircraft and selected 20 seater business jet to work on. That included everything, the type of engine it will have to what type of wing setting will be there on the aircraft. Apart from getting to revisit the root of my core subjects once more I also got to learn more about the different areas which I had previously not ventured in then and had that much in-depth knowledge about. I led my team and divided the tasks amongst ourselves bearing in mind everyone’s weaknesses and strengths, we successfully gathered information on different types of business jets and compared them and came up with data that would suit our aircraft. Furthermore, we went through different engines and different landing gears among many other things while keeping in mind what could suit in economical and longevity aspects to our aircraft. After that was done I took the initiative of making a 3D model of our business jet in Solid Works with some help from my friend and we were successfully able to do it and display the different views of our design. While working on this project I also read through many research papers in order to make our project better and stand out from the rest of my classmates. In addition to the project we were also asked to add a special feature to our design, following which I proposed the idea of adding air refueling which could prove very handy when going for longer and lengthier trips. We were satisfied with the outcome of the design and we wanted to keep pursuing it in more depth in the upcoming semester where we can make more changes and make our design even more viable and better. This experience really helped me learn a lot of different things that enhanced my skills and motivated me to do even better in the future if another such opportunity arises. Working on this project really broadened my horizons on what this field holds and it also played a big hand in me realizing my dreams. I also improved on my time management skills and also polished my leaderships skills, while also working on my critical thinking and teamwork. As a student of science learning cannot take a backseat, you learn new things everyday. So even with corona spreading rapidly and the entire world going into lockdown, I did not let it deter me from my goals. The lack of physical classes and practicals was going to be an issue but my hunger for more knowledge kept me going as I started applying for internships and attended many webinars on different topics related to my field, I did an NPTEL course on aircraft stability and control to make my grasp on the subject even better. {ALTERNATE}// The transition from physical classes to online classes wasn't a smooth one, so to keep myself up to date I watched YouTube videos from different NPTEL courses to make up for it and did not let it stop me from learning //. I did an internship in Brahmastra Aerospace startup which helped me brush up my topics from earlier semesters and had the chance to interact with people who have field experience and it was really invigorating to learn from such professionals. Moreover, I attended multiple webinars related to my field, and when the opportunity arose for me to try out different things I didn’t shy away as I also did a a week long course in IoT where I along with my teammates successfully did the coding and modelled six different robots. I am currently doing an IoT internship to keep myself in the loop about the advancements in IoT as it is going to be part of our lives in the future. I also did courses from Coursera and EdX related to my field and also some other courses, Psychology and Introduction to Python, to keep myself fresh and have a general understanding of various subjects. I also had the liberty to attended rocket building workshop where I learned how to build two different types of rockets on a smaller scale it was a fascinating experience as I got to understand the mechanics and structural side of building a rocket. I really learned a lot during that workshop and that has helped me throughout my undergraduate degree. In my college I was part of Nebula Astro club where I interacted with my club members and participated in different competitions held by the club. I was an active member of the club and it helped me boost my people skills and also gave me a creative edge. I learned how to work with a group of people with unity and aim for a good result. We have come leaps and bounds from the first artificial satellite launch to astronauts being able to consume food that was grown in space but there is still a long way to go. The dream to explore the wide universe is still a far away one but with rapid advancements in technology and the high interest nowadays by people, I think these dreams can come true in the foreseeable future. Aerospace industry is making such dreams come closer to reality one launch at a time, what excites me the most about studying and working in this field one day is that we are working on exploring the unknown and making space habitable to humans someday, the amount of knowledge that is to be gained surpasses the amount of knowledge that we have currently. With the experiences that I have had in my undergraduate degree and from my school I want to keep moving forward with the same curiosity that I had when I first got into the subject. My hard work and my passion for the subject wills me to keep getting better and keep learning every day. With a masters degree I want to do that, I want to gain advanced practical knowledge and hope that maybe someday in the future I'll play an active part in one of the ground breaking space endeavors. I would also like to pursue a PhD in structures and composites or space mechanics once I am done with my Master’s degree. My work hard and give it all attitude will drive me on during my degree.
On October 4th 1957, the whole
world
witnessed the
launch
of Sputnik satellite which
was done
with the
help
of the
rocket
R-7 ICBM from
tyuratam
launch
base in the Kazakh Republic. Sputnik was the
worlds
first
artificial satellite and it
was named
after the Russian word for “satellite” and
was launched
by the Soviet Union. The successful
launch
of Sputnik ushered in what has been
described
as the
“space
age”, after which we have witnessed
many
successful
launches
into
space
, and
also
expanded our
knowledge
about the outer
world
. We have
come
a long way since then, from a satellite
launch
to one of sending humans to Mars in less than 70 years is no easy feat, the advancement in technology has gone
leaps and bounds
and the
only
thing limiting us
right
now
is our
own
self. With major contributions from scientists such as
Wernher
Von
Braun,
who
was treated
as a pioneer in the aerospace
field
, alongside the legendary engineer Robert Goddard
who
built the
world’s
first
liquid-fuelled
rocket
, and the
man
who
lived
the
dream
of every child; Neil Armstrong
first
man
ever to land on the moon. These stories inspire everyone and these
people
become the source of inspiration. To contribute to this
field
and maybe one day become one of these
people
in the inspiring stories, I
want
to pursue my Master’s
Degree
in Aerospace Engineering at *** University.

I was always an avid reader of books and I
still
am,
but
nonfictional novels never
really
caught my interest and it wasn’t until I was in my 8th standard and I
got
my hands on “Wings of Fire” it is the autobiography of APJ Abdul
Kalam
who
is
also
known as missile
man
of India. I was
very
sceptical
before
reading the book
but
when I
started
reading it I couldn’t put it down. He was the
man
responsible for India making rapid inroads into the aerospace industry at a time when
many
people
wouldn’t have even
given
India a chance to
launch
rockets
. After I had finished his autobiography I realized what a brilliant
man
he was and how
much
he inspired me by his words and that someday even a daydreaming kid like me would
also
be associated
with the same
field
that he had practiced in. When I was in 10th
class
there was a chapter in physics called “Light” which gave me a brief
idea
about
space
exploration using telescopes and how
much
of our universe was
still
unexplored, looking back I
think
that was the final straw that
really
pushed me into making aerospace as my
future
. I went to school and had a lengthy discussion with physics teacher, and he with
much
patience answered me the best he could. I came back home satisfied
but
my eagerness to
learn
more and more about this
subject
only
grew. With this my mindset I
started
my
Btech
Degree
in Aerospace where I had various core
subjects
which include Jet Propulsion,
Aircraft
Stability and Control, Composite Materials and Structures,
Rockets
and Missiles,
Space
Mechanics, Control Theory and few others
but
I was more interested in the Composite Materials and Structures and
Space
Mechanics
classes
. These were the two
subjects
which
really
piqued my interest more than and I wanted to do
good
in these
subjects
and
learn
as
much
as I
possibly
could, these two
subjects
highlighted my 4 years
degree
here as they had
many
interesting topics which
kept
feeding my curiosity and my inquiring mind with solutions which
kept
me invested in
learning
the
subject
. The practical
classes
gave me a new
experience
and understanding of the things that I
only
read about in the
classes
or online. I
initially
struggled in Thermodynamics and Propulsion, I
also
ended up failing in Thermodynamics in a semester
but
I backed myself to do
better
. In the subsequent semester I had Propulsion and I put in
a lot of
hard
work
as I have trouble in that
subject and
I was able to
clear
it. Propulsion and Thermodynamics have taught me to challenge myself and be
better
and to
learn
from my failures and tackle the difficult situations face on.

In the sixth semester of my undergraduate, I had the opportunity to attend a
class
called
Design
Project
in which I along with two more students had to
design
a
aircraft
of our choosing from scratch. We decided to select a more challenging
aircraft
and selected 20 seater business jet to
work
on. That included everything, the
type
of engine it will
have to
what
type
of wing setting will be there on the
aircraft
. Apart from getting to revisit the root of my core
subjects
once more I
also
got
to
learn
more about the
different
areas which I had previously not ventured in then and had that
much
in-depth
knowledge
about. I led my team and divided the tasks amongst ourselves bearing in mind everyone’s weaknesses and strengths, we
successfully
gathered information on
different
types
of business jets and compared them and came up with data that would suit our
aircraft
.
Furthermore
, we went through
different
engines and
different
landing gears
among
many
other things while keeping in mind what could suit in economical and longevity aspects to our
aircraft
. After that
was done
I took the initiative of making a 3D model of our business jet in Solid Works with
some
help
from my
friend and
we were
successfully
able to do it and display the
different
views of our
design
. While
working
on this
project
I
also
read through
many
research papers in order to
make
our
project
better
and stand out from the rest of my classmates.
In addition
to the
project
we were
also
asked to
add
a special feature to our
design
, following which I proposed the
idea
of adding air refueling which could prove
very
handy when going for longer and lengthier trips. We
were satisfied
with the outcome of the
design and
we wanted to
keep
pursuing it in more depth in the upcoming semester where we can
make
more
changes
and
make
our
design
even more viable and
better
. This
experience
really
helped
me
learn
a lot of
different
things that enhanced my
skills
and motivated me to do even
better
in the
future
if another such opportunity arises.
Working
on this
project
really
broadened my horizons on what this
field
holds and it
also
played a
big
hand in me realizing my
dreams
. I
also
improved
on my time management
skills
and
also
polished my leaderships
skills
, while
also
working
on my critical thinking and teamwork.

As a student of science
learning
cannot take a backseat, you
learn
new things
everyday
.
So
even with corona spreading
rapidly
and the entire
world
going into lockdown, I did not
let
it deter me from my goals. The lack of physical
classes
and practicals was going to be an issue
but
my hunger for more
knowledge
kept
me going as I
started
applying for internships and attended
many
webinars on
different
topics related to my
field
, I did an
NPTEL
course
on
aircraft
stability and control to
make
my grasp on the
subject
even better.

{ALTERNATE}// The transition from physical
classes
to online
classes
wasn't a smooth one,
so
to
keep
myself up to date I
watched
YouTube videos from
different
NPTEL
courses
to
make
up for it and did not
let
it
stop
me from
learning
//.

I did an internship in
Brahmastra
Aerospace startup which
helped
me brush up my topics from earlier semesters and had the chance to interact with
people
who
have
field
experience
and it was
really
invigorating to
learn
from such professionals.
Moreover
, I attended multiple webinars related to my
field
, and when the opportunity arose for me to try out
different
things I didn’t shy away as I
also
did
a a
week long
course
in IoT where I along with my teammates
successfully
did the coding and modelled six
different
robots. I am
currently
doing an IoT internship to
keep
myself in the loop about the advancements in IoT as it is going to be part of our
lives
in the
future
. I
also
did
courses
from Coursera and
EdX
related to my
field
and
also
some
other
courses
, Psychology and Introduction to Python, to
keep
myself fresh and have a general understanding of various
subjects
.
I
also
had the liberty to attended
rocket
building workshop where I learned how to build two
different
types
of
rockets
on a smaller scale it was a fascinating
experience
as I
got
to understand the mechanics and structural side of building a
rocket
.
I
really
learned a lot during that workshop and that has
helped
me throughout my undergraduate
degree
. In my college I was part of Nebula
Astro
club
where I interacted with my
club
members and participated in
different
competitions held by the
club
. I was an active member of the
club
and it
helped
me boost my
people
skills
and
also
gave me a creative edge. I learned how to
work
with a group of
people
with unity and aim for a
good
result.

We have
come
leaps and bounds
from the
first
artificial satellite
launch
to astronauts being able to consume food that
was grown
in
space
but
there is
still
a long way to go. The
dream
to explore the wide universe is
still
a far away one
but
with rapid advancements in technology and the high interest nowadays by
people
, I
think
these
dreams
can
come
true in the foreseeable
future
. Aerospace industry is making such
dreams
come
closer to reality one
launch
at a time, what excites me the most about studying and
working
in this
field
one day is that we are
working
on exploring the unknown and making
space
habitable to humans someday, the amount of
knowledge
that is
to
be gained
surpasses the amount of
knowledge
that we have
currently
. With the
experiences
that I have had in my undergraduate
degree
and from my school I
want
to
keep
moving forward with the same curiosity that I had when I
first
got
into the
subject
. My
hard
work
and my passion for the
subject
wills me to
keep
getting
better
and
keep
learning
every day. With a
masters
degree
I
want
to do that, I
want
to gain advanced practical
knowledge
and hope that maybe someday in the
future
I'll play an active part in one of the ground breaking
space
endeavors. I would
also
like to pursue a PhD in structures and composites or
space
mechanics once I
am done
with my Master’s
degree
. My
work
hard
and give it all attitude will drive me on during my
degree
.
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