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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. ... As a result, many of them struggle financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences.

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. . . . As a result, many of them struggle financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences. aJEL7
A large of criminals after getting bail from prison even commit more crimes. The basic phenomenon behind this situation is lack of awareness and education. No one is born criminal, situations make people commit miserable things in their life. In my opinion, there are numerous measures can be taken to tackle problem related to offenders. Firstly, in prison if possible twice a week classes should be conducted to teach offenders about basic human values. Because there is a link missing between them and education, which is why they don't understand basic human behaviour and act in unpleasant ways. Secondly, authorities must provide psychological treatment to prisoners, with they will be aware of his/her past and whether they are suffering from any mental disorder which has to be cure. Also, we as responsible members of society must take care, for example when an offender returns from jail, keep eye on them. Try to keep things away that can provoke them to commit the crime once again. In conclusion, having training in prison and providing them useful knowledge will eventually guide them towards a better future. Talking about mental health can also raise self-awareness in them. So self-realization makes them more strong and in future possibility of recommitting crime get decrease.
A large of criminals after getting bail from prison even commit more crimes. The basic phenomenon behind this situation is lack of awareness and education. No one
is born
criminal, situations
make
people
commit miserable things in their life. In my opinion, there are numerous measures can
be taken
to tackle problem related to offenders.

Firstly
, in prison if possible twice a week classes should
be conducted
to teach offenders about basic human values.
Because
there is a link missing between them and education, which is why they don't understand basic human
behaviour
and act in unpleasant ways.
Secondly
, authorities
must
provide psychological treatment to prisoners, with they will be aware of his/her past and whether they are suffering from any mental disorder which
has to
be
cure
.

Also
, we as responsible members of society
must
take care,
for example
when an offender returns from jail,
keep
eye on them. Try to
keep
things away that can provoke them to commit the crime once again.

In conclusion
, having training in prison and providing them useful knowledge will
eventually
guide them towards a better future.

Talking about mental health can
also
raise self-awareness in them.
So
self-realization
makes
them more strong and in future possibility of recommitting crime
get
decrease.
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IELTS speaking Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. . . . As a result, many of them struggle financially which leads them back to crime, regardless of the consequences.

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