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Describe the traffic jam in your city. v.1

Describe the traffic jam in your city. v. 1
Describe the traffic jam in your city. You should say: how it happens what is the situation what problems people face due to this. and what could be done to control this traffic jam.   Model Answer 1: Traffic jam is a reality of the city life, and we have all seen it happen, from slowing down to crawling to complete stop, whether there is a reason for this type of bad traffic or not. Then, minutes later, it begins to move again and then suddenly moving to full speed. 'Why does this happen anyway' is a question many people ask and we all ask 'what could be done about it'! Well, it happens because even a minor but natural “disruption”, like slight brake of a car or an unexpected bump in the roads, to the flow of traffic can cause a “self-enforcing” chain reaction which eventually amplifies until it creates a wave of slowed or stopped traffic. But, even when cars manage to leave this kind of irritating traffic jam or wave, the jam or wave doesn’t disappear itself as it may gradually drift backwards against the direction of the traffic. Anyway, sometimes these traffic congestions bring the ‘worst’ in people, people who usually never become “angry”, as we get “agitated” and start blaming each other for the traffic congestion. Of course, people have their reasons for such “agitation” because, to begin with, it wastes their valuable time which otherwise could have been used to spend with their families or used in doing something “constructive”. Besides, when people get stuck in the traffic for longer than “usual”, they usually fail to get their “jobs” done on time, making them look inept or inefficient in the eyes of friends, co-workers and managers. Spending more time on the road also causes people to usually spend more on the fuel cost for their vehicles. As a whole, the country suffers from economic losses. Anyway, we can control these kinds of traffic congestion if we choose to rely more on public transportation, which can carry and accommodate more people at once, instead of using private vehicles at will and at any time. We could also do things like widen our roads and streets and becoming more cautious in maintaining our cars more frequently in order to avoid “movement interruptions” on the roads, but we could also “build” more “technologically-advanced” cars which could adjust their “speeds” or change the roads/lanes by sensing the traffic jams ahead well in advance.   Sample Answer 2: I come from (. . . say the city name…) and this city accommodates a large number of population. Due to this huge population and the increased number of public and private cars, the city often faces bad traffics. The number of people living in this city, the cars they are using and the public transportation they need are much higher compared to the number of roads. As a result, the traffic jam often occurs and people have to suffer. Another reason for the traffic jam is the unauthorised parking of cars in the street. People do not often follow the exact traffic rules and because of their insincerity, we often face the horrible traffics in the streets. The traffic jam in our city is one of the terrible things the city dwellers have to face. People get stuck on the roads and they have no idea when they would be able to reach their destination. Because of this jam, people often miss important schedules, students can’t reach school in time and the outcome is devastating. Because of the jam in the street people have to schedule accordingly and the total time killed in the street is simply a waste of time. There are many steps which should be taken to reduce the jam in the street. First of all the people who are driving in the street should very strictly follow the traffic rules. The traffic control authority should more strictly apply the rules. The number of private automobiles is increasing rapidly. Many single families own multiple cars and thus increase the number of total cars driving in the street. The rule should be imposed on purchasing cars and the price of the fuel could be increased as well. The public transportation system should be improved so that people can travel in public cars. The city has more population than it can comprise and decentralisation of industries, offices and educational institutes can be another solution to this abhorrent problem.     Similar Cue Card topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a problem that you face in your city. Describe a bad experience you recently had. Describe a thing that you would like to change in your city. Describe something annoying about the place you live in.
Describe
the
traffic
jam in your city. You should say: how it
happens
what is the situation what problems
people
face
due to this.
and
what could
be done
to control this
traffic
jam.
 
Model Answer
1: Traffic
jam is a reality of the city life, and we have all
seen
it
happen
, from slowing down to crawling to complete
stop
, whether there is a reason for this type of
bad
traffic
or not. Then, minutes later, it
begins
to
move
again and then
suddenly
moving to full speed. 'Why does this
happen
anyway
' is a question
many
people
ask and
we all ask 'what could
be done
about it'!

Well
, it
happens
because
even a minor
but
natural “disruption”, like slight brake of a
car
or an unexpected bump in the
roads
, to the flow of
traffic
can cause a “self-enforcing” chain reaction which
eventually
amplifies until it creates a wave of slowed or
stopped
traffic
.
But
, even when
cars
manage to
leave
this kind of irritating
traffic
jam or wave, the jam or wave doesn’t disappear itself as it may
gradually
drift backwards against the direction of the traffic.

Anyway
,
sometimes
these
traffic
congestions bring the ‘worst’ in
people
,
people
who
usually
never become “angry”, as we
get
“agitated” and
start
blaming each other for the
traffic
congestion.
Of course
,
people
have their reasons for such “agitation”
because
, to
begin
with, it wastes their valuable
time
which
otherwise
could have been
used
to spend with their families or
used
in doing something “constructive”.
Besides
, when
people
get
stuck in the
traffic
for longer than “usual”, they
usually
fail to
get
their “jobs” done on
time
, making them look inept or inefficient in the eyes of friends, co-workers and managers. Spending more
time
on the
road
also
causes
people
to
usually
spend more on the fuel cost for their vehicles. As a whole, the country suffers from economic losses.

Anyway
, we can control these kinds of
traffic
congestion if we choose to rely more on
public
transportation, which can carry and accommodate more
people
at once,
instead
of using private vehicles at will and at any
time
. We could
also
do things like widen our
roads
and
streets
and becoming more cautious in maintaining our
cars
more
frequently
in order to avoid “movement interruptions” on the
roads
,
but
we could
also
“build” more “
technologically
-advanced”
cars
which could adjust their “speeds” or
change
the roads/lanes by sensing the
traffic
jams ahead
well
in advance.
 
Sample Answer 2:

I
come
from (.
.
.
say
the city name…) and this city accommodates a large
number
of population. Due to this huge population and the increased
number
of
public
and private
cars
, the city
often
faces
bad
traffics.

The
number
of
people
living in this city, the
cars
they are using and the
public
transportation they need are much higher compared to the
number
of
roads
.
As a result
, the
traffic
jam
often
occurs and
people
have to
suffer. Another reason for the
traffic
jam is the
unauthorised
parking of
cars
in the
street
.
People
do not
often
follow the exact
traffic
rules
and
because
of their insincerity, we
often
face
the horrible
traffics
in the streets.

The
traffic
jam in our city is one of the terrible things the city dwellers
have to
face
.
People
get
stuck on the
roads and
they have no
idea
when they would be able to reach their destination.
Because of this
jam,
people
often
miss
important
schedules, students can’t reach school in
time
and the outcome is devastating.
Because
of the jam in the
street
people
have to
schedule
accordingly
and the total
time
killed in the
street
is
simply
a waste of time.

There are
many
steps which should
be taken
to
reduce
the jam in the
street
.
First of all
the
people
who are driving in the
street
should
very
strictly
follow the
traffic
rules
. The
traffic
control authority should more
strictly
apply the
rules
. The
number
of private automobiles is increasing
rapidly
.
Many
single families
own
multiple
cars
and
thus
increase the
number
of total
cars
driving in the
street
. The
rule
should
be imposed
on purchasing
cars
and the price of the fuel could
be increased
as
well
. The
public
transportation system should be
improved
so
that
people
can travel in
public
cars
.
The
city has more population than it can comprise and
decentralisation
of industries, offices and educational institutes can be another solution to this abhorrent problem.
   
Similar Cue Card topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
Describe
a problem that you
face
in your city.
Describe
a
bad
experience you recently had.
Describe
a thing that you would like to
change
in your city.
Describe
something annoying about the place you
live
in.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
99Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe the traffic jam in your city. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
814 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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