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Describe a time when you had to wait in a traffic jam. v.1

Describe a time when you had to wait in a traffic jam. v. 1
Describe a time when you had to wait in a traffic jam. You should say: when and where it happened how long you were in the traffic jam what you did while waiting and explain how you felt when you were in that traffic jam. Sample Answer 1: Well, traffic jam in our city is not unusual and the regular commuters often suffer from horrible congestion on roads. A recent study shows that around 20 hours of time is wasted for an average commuter each month in our city and that statistics depicts how heinous the traffic jam in our city is. While thinking about a time when I had to wait in a traffic jam, I could remember many such events and for this cue card topic, I will talk about a particular event when the traffic jam was so pathetic that I literally went mad! It was about a year ago when I went to our national airport to see off a relative who would leave for the United Kingdom. On our way to the airport, the traffic was usual and we reached there in a taxi that took around 45 minutes. After I saw off this relative, I went to the nearby bus station to pick a public bus to return home. I got a bus within 15 minutes and in next 10 minutes, the road traffic was good. All of a sudden the bus stopped at a traffic signal and it did not move for the next 20 minutes. People on the bus got anxious and they started talking about what happened. I got off from the bus to investigate what actually happened. I tried to talk to a traffic police but he was so busy that I could not even grab his attention. I got back to the bus and heard more bad news. Some passengers were talking about an accident and how that had created the deadlock on the route. I bought a newspaper and waited next 30 minutes very patiently and was expecting that things would get back to its normal condition soon. However, it did not and I heard that many students have blocked the road as one of their classmates died because of the accident. Police and those students had a hot debate and they were adamant to leave the road until the bus driver who caused the accident was arrested and punished. It was a situation that would not be resolved soon and that’s why many bus passengers left the bus to get back to their home. I had to reach home and I heard that the alternative road was also blocked. I was quite furious at that time but had nothing to do. My cell phone battery was beeping to indicate that it will be turned off anytime and the distance was more than 2 miles to reach home. I decided to walk and then again waited for few more minutes. Thus two hours passed and at that time I left the bus to walk. The walking experience was not that good. There were people everywhere and I felt stupid not to leave the bus earlier. I saw so many police officers and traffic police who were trying to handle the situation but I noticed things were getting even worse. Luckily I had no bag or anything to carry with me. Thus I walked for another 2 hours and finally I reached home quite exhausted and in awful condition.
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Describe
a
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time
when you had to wait in a
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traffic
jam. You should say: when and where it happened how long you were in the
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traffic
jam what you did while waiting and
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explain
how you felt when you were in that
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traffic
jam. Sample Answer 1:

Well
,
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traffic
jam in our city is not unusual and the regular commuters
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often
suffer from horrible congestion on
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roads
. A recent study
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shows
that around 20 hours of
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time
is wasted
for an average commuter each month in our city and that statistics depicts how heinous the
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traffic
jam in our city is. While thinking about a
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time
when I had to wait in a
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traffic
jam, I could remember
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many
such
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events
and for this cue card topic, I will talk about a particular
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event
when the
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traffic
jam was
so
pathetic that I
literally
went mad! It was about a year ago when I went to our national airport to
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see
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off
a relative who would
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leave
for the United Kingdom. On our way to the airport, the
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traffic
was
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usual and
we reached there in a taxi that took around 45 minutes. After I
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saw
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off
this relative, I went to the nearby bus station to pick a public bus to return home. I
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got
a bus within 15 minutes and in
next
10 minutes, the
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road
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traffic
was
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good
. All of a sudden the bus
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stopped
at a
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traffic
signal and it did not
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move
for the
next
20 minutes.
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People
on the bus
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got
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anxious and
they
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started
talking about what happened. I
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got
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off
from the bus to investigate what
actually
happened. I tried to talk to a
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traffic
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police
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but
he was
so
busy that I could not even grab his attention.
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I
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got
back to the bus and heard more
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bad
news.
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Some
passengers were talking about an accident and how that had created the deadlock on the route. I
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bought
a newspaper and waited
next
30 minutes
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very
patiently
and was expecting that things would
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get
back to its normal condition
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soon
.
However
, it did not and I heard that
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many
students have blocked the
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road
as one of their classmates
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died
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because
of the accident.
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Police
and those students had a hot
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debate and
they were adamant to
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leave
the
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road
until the bus driver who caused the accident
was arrested
and punished. It was a situation that would not
be resolved
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soon
and that’s why
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many
bus passengers
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left
the bus to
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get
back to their home. I had to reach home and I heard that the alternative
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road
was
also
blocked. I was quite furious at that
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time
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but
had nothing to do. My cell phone battery was beeping to indicate that it will
be turned
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off
anytime and the distance was more than
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2 miles
to reach home. I decided to walk and then again waited for few more minutes.
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Thus
two hours passed and at that
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time
I
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left
the bus to walk. The walking experience was not that
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good
. There were
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people
everywhere and I felt stupid not to
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leave
the bus earlier. I
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saw
so
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many
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police
officers and
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traffic
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police
who were trying to handle the situation
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but
I noticed things were getting even worse. Luckily I had no bag or anything to carry with me.
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Thus
I walked for another 2 hours and
finally
I reached home quite exhausted and in awful condition.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you had to wait in a traffic jam. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
580 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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