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Describe the environmental pollution in your city. v.1

Describe the environmental pollution in your city. v. 1
Describe the environmental pollution in your city. You should say: what type of pollution it is why it happened what are the effects of this pollution and explain how can this pollution be controlled.   Model Answer 1: Environmental pollution is a serious modern-day problem for any county and its cities all over the world, and the situation is only getting worse for the most part. Anyway, today, I would like to talk about the same pollution problem which my city is also facing increasingly. Not too long ago, my city used to be considered as one of the safest cities in my country as far as environmental pollution is concerned. In fact, many people from around my whole country settled down in my city in the past because of its greenery, clean air and clean water.   But, today, the situation has dramatically changed because its air is not completely safe to inhale because there are just too many vehicles on the roads and streets today that emit carbon monoxide, carbon dioxide and nitrogen oxide. And, we all know how these ingredients pollute our atmosphere and air. As far as the surface water of my city is concerned, it is also contaminated because of too much industrial and toxic waste. Another type of indirect environmental pollution, which is affecting my city, is that its lands and trees are being used (some would say “destroyed”) indiscriminately in order to make rooms for residential and industrial buildings. And, as this happens, it takes away the oxygen supplies of my city. Anyway, as this environmental pollution takes place, people in my city are increasingly suffering from lung diseases and other kinds of respiratory problems, especially, during the cold weather.   Besides, the city also has to spend extra money in order to purify its drinking water, which is putting extra pressure on its budget. This pollution can be controlled by first limiting the number of private vehicles on the roads to reduce carbon emission in the atmosphere. The city should also put in place a more efficient filtering system in order to stop the industrial toxic waste from entering the source of water supply. Finally, the city should adopt a scheme of planting more trees in and around the city in order to cleanse its polluted air.   Sample Answer 2: I live in (. . say the name of your city. . ) and this city has got some several issues related to environmental pollution. The major environmental pollutions that this city has are water pollution, air pollution and sound pollution. The main reason for these pollutions is overpopulation and rapid and unplanned industrialisation of this city. The city has more than (…say the current population level of this city. . . ) whereas the number should have been far less than that. It is evitable that a large number of populations in a small city always cause environmental pollution as they use more cars, consume more energy and natural resources and create more wastages and noises. The reason for water pollution is the uncontrolled number of industries, factories and other constructions that have been grown up beside the rivers. These factories and industries produce a large number of chemical and other wastages which directly affects the water. Inappropriate and uncontrolled construction is another reason for water pollution in our city. The effect of water pollution is severe, the water supply would be affected and the supply of safe and clean water would be threatened. A large number of people rely on the water of the rivers and they would be directly affected. Lots of people would get sick due to water pollution and those diseases can become epidemics if not controlled and that results in an immense loss of innocent lives. Air pollution is also very concerning in this city and the chemical smoke, carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide emitted from automobiles and industries are the main reason for air pollution. This city has more than millions of automobiles and thousands of industries which are omitting the dangerous gases, and ingredients which are causing the air pollutions.   Air pollution is the direct reason people suffer from various dangerous diseases including lung cancer, asthma, heart disease etc. In fact, the number of people currently suffering from these diseases is alarming and if proper steps are not taken to prevent air pollution immediately, this number would rapidly increase. Sound pollution is produced by the loud horns used by the cars, loud sound used for announcement and cacophony created due to loud sound. Aeroplanes that fly over the resident area created a very loud noise as well. Air pollution is a silent killer that causes lots of serious diseases including hearing and brain cancer. The air pollution directly affects the natural balance by affecting the wild lives. The most important thing to reduce pollution in our city is to create public awareness. We are mostly creating that pollution and endangering ourselves, the Earth and other species. Without our awareness and strict determination to prevent our city from pollution, we can’t reduce or prevent it. Strict laws should be introduced and be applied against any environmental pollution and all the illegitimate industries and companies should be banned. The decentralisation of industries and offices can be effective as it would reduce the number of people currently living in this city. Job opportunities and other facilities should be improved in rural areas so that people can manage works in their own cities and villages other than coming to this city. Education and morality are two important aspects that help people understand the necessity of keeping the city clean and healthy.   Part 3 – Two-way discussion: Q. Is water pollution a problem in your country? Q. What are some of the causes of water pollution? Q. What can individuals do to try and ensure water is kept clean? Q. Do you think problems with the cleanliness of water will improve in the future? Q. What can an individual do to reduce the pollution in your city? Q. How pollution can affect the biodiversity of our environment?   Similar Cue Card topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: 1. Describe a problem that you face your city. 2. Describe pollution that causes a great problem in your city. 3. Describe a city you know that has air pollution. 4. Describe something you would like to change in your city. 5. Describe a law you would like to introduce in your community. 6. Describe something irritating in your community. 7. Describe a change that has happened to the place you live in.
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Describe
the
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environmental
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pollution
in your city. You should say: what type of
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pollution
it is why it happened what are the effects of this
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pollution
and
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explain
how can this
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pollution
be controlled
.
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Model Answer
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1: Environmental
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pollution
is a serious modern-day
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problem
for any county and its
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cities
all over the world, and the situation is
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only
getting worse
for the most part
.
Anyway
,
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today
, I would like to talk about the same
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pollution
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problem
which my city is
also
facing
increasingly
.

Not too long ago, my city
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used
to
be considered
as one of the safest
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cities
in my country as far as
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environmental
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pollution
is concerned
. In fact,
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many
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people
from around my whole country settled down in my city in the past
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because
of its greenery,
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clean
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air
and
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clean
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water
.
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But
,
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today
, the situation has
dramatically
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changed
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because
its
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air
is not completely safe to inhale
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because
there are
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just
too
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many
vehicles on the roads and streets
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today
that emit
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carbon
monoxide,
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carbon
dioxide and nitrogen oxide. And, we all know how these ingredients pollute our atmosphere and air.

As far as the surface
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water
of my city
is concerned
, it is
also
contaminated
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because
of too much industrial and toxic waste. Another type of indirect
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environmental
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pollution
, which is affecting my city, is that its lands and trees are being
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used
(
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some
would say “
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destroyed
”)
indiscriminately
in
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order
to
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make
rooms for residential and industrial buildings. And, as this happens, it takes away the oxygen supplies of my city.
Anyway
, as this
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environmental
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pollution
takes place,
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people
in my city are
increasingly
suffering from lung
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diseases
and
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other
kinds of respiratory
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problems
,
especially
, during the
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cold
weather.
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Besides
, the city
also
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has to
spend extra money in
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order
to purify its drinking
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water
, which is putting extra pressure on its budget.

This
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pollution
can
be controlled
by
first
limiting the
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number
of private vehicles on the roads to
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reduce
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carbon
emission in the atmosphere. The city should
also
put in place a more efficient filtering system in
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order
to
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stop
the industrial toxic waste from entering the source of
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water
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supply
.
Finally
, the city should adopt a scheme of planting more trees in and around the city in
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order
to cleanse its polluted
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air
.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
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live
in (.
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.
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say
the name of your city.
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.
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)
and this city has
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got
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some
several issues related to
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environmental
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pollution
. The major
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environmental
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pollutions
that this city has are
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water
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pollution
,
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air
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pollution
and sound pollution.

The main
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reason
for these
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pollutions
is overpopulation and rapid and unplanned
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industrialisation
of this city.
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The
city has more than (…say the
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current
population level of this city.
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.
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.
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)
whereas the
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number
should have been far less than that. It is
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evitable
that a large
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number
of populations in a
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small
city always
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cause
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environmental
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pollution
as they
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use
more cars, consume more energy and natural resources and create more
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wastages
and noises.

The
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reason
for
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water
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pollution
is the uncontrolled
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number
of
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industries
, factories and
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other
constructions that have
been grown
up beside the rivers. These factories and
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industries
produce a large
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number
of chemical and
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other
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wastages
which
directly
affects the
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water
. Inappropriate and uncontrolled construction is another
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reason
for
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water
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pollution
in our city. The effect of
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water
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pollution
is severe, the
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water
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supply
would be
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affected
and the
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supply
of safe and
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clean
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water
would
be threatened
. A large
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number
of
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people
rely on the
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water
of the
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rivers and
they would be
directly
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affected
. Lots of
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people
would
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get
sick due to
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water
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pollution
and those
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diseases
can become epidemics if not controlled and that results in an immense loss of innocent
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lives
.

Air
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pollution
is
also
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very
concerning in this city and the chemical smoke,
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carbon
dioxide and
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carbon
monoxide emitted from automobiles and
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industries
are the main
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reason
for
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air
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pollution
. This city has more than millions of automobiles and thousands of
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industries
which are omitting the
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dangerous
gases, and ingredients which are causing the
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air
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pollutions
.
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Air
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pollution
is the direct
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reason
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people
suffer from various
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dangerous
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diseases
including lung cancer, asthma, heart
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disease
etc. In fact, the
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number
of
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people
currently
suffering from these
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diseases
is alarming and if proper steps are not taken to
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prevent
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air
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pollution
immediately, this
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number
would
rapidly
increase.

Sound
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pollution
is produced
by the
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loud
horns
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used
by the cars,
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loud
sound
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used
for announcement and cacophony created due to
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loud
sound.
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Aeroplanes
that
fly
over the resident area created a
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very
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loud
noise as
well
.
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Air
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pollution
is a silent killer that
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causes
lots of serious
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diseases
including hearing and brain cancer. The
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air
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pollution
directly
affects the natural balance by affecting the wild
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lives
.

The most
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important
thing to
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reduce
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pollution
in our city is to create public awareness. We are
mostly
creating that
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pollution
and endangering ourselves, the Earth and
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other
species. Without our awareness and strict determination to
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prevent
our city from
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pollution
, we can’t
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reduce
or
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prevent
it. Strict laws should
be introduced
and
be applied
against any
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environmental
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pollution
and all the illegitimate
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industries
and
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companies
should
be banned
. The
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decentralisation
of
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industries
and offices can be effective as it would
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reduce
the
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number
of
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people
currently
living in this city.

Job opportunities and
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other
facilities should be
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improved
in rural areas
so
that
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people
can manage works in their
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own
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cities
and villages
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other
than coming to this city. Education and morality are two
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important
aspects that
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help
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people
understand the necessity of keeping the city
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clean
and healthy.
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Part 3
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
Two-way discussion: Q. Is
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water
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pollution
a
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problem
in your country? Q. What are
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some of the
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causes
of
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water
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pollution
? Q. What can individuals do to
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try and
ensure
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water
is
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kept
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clean
?
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Q
. Do you
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think
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problems
with the cleanliness of
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water
will
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improve
in the future?
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Q
. What can an individual do to
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reduce
the
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pollution
in your city?
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Q
. How
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pollution
can affect the biodiversity of our environment?
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Similar Cue Card topics: Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
: 1.
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Describe
a
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problem
that you face your city.

2.
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Describe
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pollution
that
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causes
a great
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problem
in your city.

3.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a city
you know
that has
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air
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pollution. 4
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
something you would like to
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change
in your city.

5.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a law you would like to introduce in your community.

6.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
something irritating in your community.

7.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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change
that has happened to the place you
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live
in.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
164Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe the environmental pollution in your city. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
18 paragraphs
1121 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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