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Describe a training session that you have attended. v.1

Describe a training session that you have attended. v. 1
Describe a training session that you have attended. You should say: where it was what it was about what was the most exciting and memorable part of it and explain what you learned from the training session.   Model Answer 1: I have had my fair share of training sessions in my not-so-long life as a professional. While some of those training sessions left me overwhelmed and bored, for the most part, the others were interesting enough to hold my attention for a long period of time. Today, I would like to talk about one such interesting training session that I had attended about 5 years ago. The training session was held at my company’s corporate head office when I got promoted as an Assistant Project Manager. Of course, I already had learned a little about project management due to working under my Senior Project Manager, and I thought that it would be enough for me to carry on with my responsibilities as an assistant project manager. But, as I went on with my new role, I increasingly felt the need to attend some kind of training sessions. The training was to be held in 8 sessions over 5 days, and I was to join a few other staffs at our corporate head office from a few other departments of my company like finance, customer acquisition and quality control. By the way, I was working at one of the largest construction firms in my city back then. Anyway, although the training session started with some speech from the lead trainer on how to acquire the necessary project management skills in a demanding environment, later on, it also covered important subjects like time management, risk management and effective negotiation skills. Even though the training session was an eye-opener for me in many respects, one of the most exciting parts of them was that it allowed me to find out some of my natural skills which I never knew before. I learned a number of things from the training session. First thing was that professionals should never stop learning no matter what their positions and level of experiences were. Secondly, I also learned that we can always learn new things by actually cooperating more with each other instead of competing against each other.
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that you have attended. You should say: where it was what it was about what was the most exciting and memorable part of it and
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explain
what you
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learned
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Model Answer 1:

I have had my
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fair
share of
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training
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sessions
in my not-
so
-long life as a professional. While
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some
of those
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training
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sessions
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left
me overwhelmed and bored,
for the most part
, the others were interesting
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enough
to hold my attention for a long period of time.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such interesting
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training
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session
that I had attended about 5 years ago.

The
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training
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session
was held
at my
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company
’s corporate head office when I
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got
promoted as an Assistant
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Project
Manager.
Of course
, I already had
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learned
a
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little
about
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project
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management
due to working under my Senior
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Project
Manager, and I
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thought
that it would be
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enough
for me to carry on with my responsibilities as an assistant
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project
manager.
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But
, as I went on with my new role, I
increasingly
felt the need to attend
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some
kind of
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training
sessions.

The
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was to
be held
in 8
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sessions
over 5 days, and I was to
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join
a few
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other
staffs at our corporate head office from a few
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other
departments of my
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company
like finance, customer acquisition and quality control. By the way, I was working at one of the largest construction firms in my city back then.

Anyway
, although the
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training
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session
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started
with
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some
speech from the lead trainer on how to acquire the necessary
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project
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management
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skills
in a demanding environment, later on, it
also
covered
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important
subjects like time
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management
,
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risk
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management
and effective negotiation
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skills
.
Even though
the
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training
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session
was an eye-opener for me in
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many
respects, one of the most exciting parts of them was that it
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allowed
me to find out
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some
of my natural
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skills
which I never knew
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before
.

I
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learned
a number of things from the
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training
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session
.
First
thing was that professionals should never
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stop
learning no matter what their positions and level of experiences were.
Secondly
, I
also
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learned
that we can always learn new things by
actually
cooperating more with each
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other
instead
of competing against each
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other
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a training session that you have attended. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
381 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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