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Describe the place where you grew up in your childhood. v.1

Describe the place where you grew up in your childhood. v. 1
Describe the place where you grew up in your childhood. You should say: describe the town/city where you grew up whether you still live there if you think the place has changed much since you were young and explain if this was a good place to grow up as a child.   Model Answer 1: Childhood memories are always great – especially, the memories of the place(s) in which we grow up as children. So, I am really glad that I have been provided such a great opportunity to talk about a place in which, I didn’t just grow up as a child, but also hold it very dearly close to my heart. Anyway, the place, where I grew up as a child, was a small town. Well, I would describe it more like a city suburb, but it certainly had all the elements to offer happy living to a 7/8 years old child like me. By the way, prior to moving that city suburb, my parents actually used to live in one of the major cities of my country which was very crowded and noisy for the liking of them. So, they decided to move to a small town, where I grew up as a child, in order to offer us an opportunity to remain close to the environment of the countryside. Since the town in which I grew up as a child was small, everything was within my reach. For example, the breakfast place, movie theatre, and stadiums to enjoy all kinds of games were all in close proximity to my residence. Besides, if I rode on my bicycle for about 15 minutes on the brick-made pavement, I could easily visit a beautiful lake and cornfields. The streets, although they were few in numbers, there were very wide which made it easy for me to play with my bicycle. Unfortunately, I don’t live there anymore, and I am pretty sure that the place must have changed a lot in time because, after all, everything changes in time. Anyway, the place, I am talking about, was certainly a good place to grow up as a child. It was quiet and beautiful. It also had a very nice and clean environment. Besides, most of the people there were very friendly, and they didn’t mind about the business of their neighbours.   All in all, it was a very simple and nice town for a laidback child like me.   Sample Answer 2: I was born in a beautiful urban area called (. . . say the name of the place where you were born and spent your childhood. . . ) and spent my childhood as well as adolescence there. This is a small urban area in the north part of the country. After I finished my college education, I moved to the capital city of the country for university education. I no longer live in my hometown but I often go there to visit my parents and other family members who still live there.   The place where I grew up is a beautiful urban area and is really a nice place to live in. It is situated beside a river and there are lots of open spaces, cornfields, paddy fields there. The green environment, comfortable weather, fresh air, scenic beauty and the simple life of people make it an ideal place. The modern facilities like internet, satellite connection, theatre, library etc are present there and yet one can stay close to nature there. The area is pollution-free, quiet and has some renowned educational institutes.   In a broader view, this urban area has not changed that much compared to the time I lived there but of course, some changes have occurred over the period. Many high rising buildings can be seen nowadays including some factories and industries. Farming was the main occupation of people which is no longer true and people now have diverse occupations. The numbers of fields and open spaces have gone down. People are widely accepting modern technology and businesses have expanded. The motorised transportations have replaced the manual ways of travelling. The lifestyle and fashions among the teenage generation seem very different than they used to be and the educational infrastructure and facilities have improved significantly than the time I had been there.     Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe your hometown. Describe the place where you lived in your childhood. Describe a memorable event in your childhood. Describe a place you like to visit. Describe a beautiful place you have visited.
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Describe
the
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place
where you
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grew
up in your childhood. You should say:
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describe
the town/city where you
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grew
up whether you
still
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live
there if you
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think
the
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place
has
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changed
much since you were young and
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explain
if this was a
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good
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place
to
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grow
up as a
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child
.
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Model Answer 1:

Childhood memories are always great
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–
especially
, the memories of the
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place(s)
in which we
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grow
up as children.
So
, I am
really
glad that I have
been provided
such a great opportunity to talk about a
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place
in which, I didn’t
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just
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grow
up as a
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child
,
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but
also
hold it
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very
dearly
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close
to my heart.

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, the
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place
, where I
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grew
up as a
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child
, was a
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small
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town
.
Well
, I would
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describe
it more like a city suburb,
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but
it
certainly
had all the elements to offer happy living to a 7/8 years
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old
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child
like me. By the way, prior to moving that city suburb, my parents
actually
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used
to
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live
in one of the major
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cities
of my country which was
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very
crowded and noisy for the liking of them.
So
, they decided to
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move
to a
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small
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town
, where I
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grew
up as a
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child
, in order to offer us an opportunity to remain
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close
to the environment of the countryside.

Since the
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town
in which I
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grew
up as a
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child
was
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small
, everything was within my reach.
For example
, the breakfast
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place
, movie
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theatre
, and stadiums to enjoy all kinds of games were all in
Consider using "proximity".
close proximity
to my residence.
Besides
, if I rode on my bicycle for about 15 minutes on the brick-made pavement, I could
easily
visit a
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beautiful
lake and cornfields. The streets, although they were few in numbers, there were
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very
wide which made it easy for me to play with my bicycle.

Unfortunately, I don’t
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live
there anymore, and I am pretty sure that the
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place
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must
have
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changed
a lot in time
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because
,
after all
, everything
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changes
in time.

Anyway
, the
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place
, I am talking about, was
certainly
a
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good
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place
to
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grow
up as a
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child
. It was quiet and
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beautiful
. It
also
had a
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very
nice and clean environment.
Besides
, most of the
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people
there were
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very
friendly, and they didn’t mind about the business of their
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neighbours
.
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All in all, it was a
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very
simple and nice
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town
for a
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laidback
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child
like me.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
was born
in a
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beautiful
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urban
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area
called (.
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.
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.
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say
the name of the
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place
where you
were born
and spent your childhood.
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.
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.
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)
and spent my childhood as
well
as adolescence there. This is a
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small
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urban
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area
in the north part of the country. After I finished my college education, I
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moved
to the capital city of the country for university education. I no longer
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live
in my hometown
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but
I
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often
go there to visit my parents and other family members who
still
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live
there.
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The
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place
where I
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grew
up is a
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beautiful
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urban
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area
and is
really
a nice
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place
to
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live
in. It
is situated
beside a river and there are lots of open spaces, cornfields, paddy fields there. The green environment, comfortable weather, fresh air, scenic beauty and the simple life of
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people
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make
it an ideal
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place
. The modern facilities like internet, satellite connection,
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theatre
, library etc are present there and
yet
one can stay
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close
to nature there.
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The
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area
is pollution-free, quiet and has
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some
renowned educational institutes.
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In a broader view, this
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urban
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area
has not
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changed
that much compared to the time I
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lived
there
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but
of course
,
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some
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changes
have occurred over the period.
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high rising buildings can be
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seen
nowadays including
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some
factories and industries.

Farming was the main occupation of
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people
which is no longer true and
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people
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now
have diverse occupations. The numbers of fields and open spaces have gone down.
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People
are
widely
accepting modern technology and businesses have expanded. The
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motorised
transportations have replaced the manual ways of travelling. The lifestyle and fashions among the teenage generation seem
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very
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different
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than
they
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used
to be and the educational infrastructure and facilities have
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improved
significantly
than the time I had been there.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
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Describe
your hometown.
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Describe
the
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place
where you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
in your childhood.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your childhood.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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place
you like to visit.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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beautiful
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place
you have visited.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
81Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe the place where you grew up in your childhood. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
781 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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