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Describe people you know who you believe are good parents. v.1

Describe people you know who you believe are good parents. v. 1
Describe people you know who you believe are good parents. You should say: who they are how you met them what they do and explain why you think they are very good parents.   Model Answer 1: I respect all parents, and I also like to believe that they are all very good parents in one way or another because all parents love their children with their life. But, I guess that some parents are a bit serious with their parenting skills than others, and today I would like to talk about one of those parents, who I have known for quite some time. These parents are none other than parents of one of my close friends. After meeting them for the first time, when my friend had invited me to enjoy a special feast at his home, I got the feeling that they were not exactly like any other parents, I had seen before. By the way, back then, I and my friends were final year university students, and so we were already old enough to know what was best for us. But, when we were just about to eat our food, my friend’s mother started to describe the taste of each and every kind of food, they had cooked for us, apparently, in an effort to let me know what kinds of foods I could eat, and what kinds of foods I could avoid if needed to. Then, when we were busy eating our foods, both the parents of my friend asked me if their son (my friend) treated me nicely since. At some points, after finishing the feast, they even asked me that if I was behaving nicely with my parents. After that, we had some more conversation among us, and all they asked me about was if I was comfortable enough at their house. In fact, from their talks, it would be difficult for someone to separate their own child from a child of some other parents. I think that they are very good parents because they don’t forget for a moment about the well-being of not only their own child but also the friend of their child. Besides, I felt like, even the negative words and criticism from them somehow would prove out to be as some very positive messages because of the way, they communicate things.
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Describe
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people
you know
who you believe are
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good
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parents
. You should say: who they are how you met them what they do and
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explain
why you
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think
they are
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very
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good
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.
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Model Answer 1:

I respect all
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parents
, and I
also
like to believe that they are all
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very
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good
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parents
in one way or another
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because
all
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parents
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love
their children with their life.
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But
,
I guess
that
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some
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parents
are a bit serious with their parenting
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skills
than others, and
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today
I would like to talk about one of those
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parents
, who I have known for quite
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some
time.

These
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parents
are none
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other
than
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parents
of one of my close
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friends
. After meeting them for the
first
time, when my
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friend
had invited me to enjoy a special feast at his home, I
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got
the feeling that they were not exactly like any
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other
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parents
, I had
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seen
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before
. By the way, back then, I and my
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friends
were final year university students, and
so
we were already
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old
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enough
to know what was best for us.
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But
, when we were
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just
about to eat our
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food
, my
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friend’s
mother
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started
to
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describe
the taste of each and every kind of
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food
, they had cooked for us,
apparently
, in an effort to
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let
me know what kinds of
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foods
I could eat, and what kinds of
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foods
I could avoid if needed to.

Then, when we were busy eating our
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foods
, both the
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parents
of my
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friend
asked me if their son (my
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friend)
treated me
nicely
since. At
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some
points, after finishing the feast, they even asked me that if I was behaving
nicely
with my
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parents
. After that, we had
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some
more conversation among us, and all they asked me about was if I was comfortable
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enough
at their
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house
. In fact, from their talks, it would be difficult for someone to separate their
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own
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child
from a
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child
of
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some
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other
parents.

I
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think
that they are
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very
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good
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parents
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because
they don’t forget for a moment about the
well
-being of not
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only
their
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own
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child
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but
also
the
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friend
of their
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child
.
Besides
, I felt like, even the
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negative
words and criticism from them somehow would prove out to be as
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some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
messages
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because
of the way, they communicate things.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe people you know who you believe are good parents. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
392 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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